Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards

Remembrance

Author: Ainaechoiriel
Nominator: Ainaechoiriel
2005 Award Category: Books/Time: Post-Ring War: Gondor Drabble - Third Place

Story Type: Drabble : Length: N/A
Rating: G -- Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: A drabble and companion to Immortal (2004 nom. at ff.net), in which Merry and Pippin asked Legolas to remember them.


Reviewed by: Marta -- Score: 6

Often a drabble (or even a longber piece) will focus on the death of one of the mortal members of the Fellowship; it's nice to see ones like this that focus on the cumulative affect of ALL those deaths. This is probably just a stylistic issue, but I find long paragraphs intimidating. I would prefer that the author had utilised paragraph breaks, perhaps before "Gandalf and I alone" and "Merry and Pippin will follow" (and maybe even make "Grief is my burden; remembrance, my destiny" its own paragraph). I almost think this would work better as a trio of drabbles, focusing on the departure/death of: Frodo, Sam, and Gandalf; Merry and Pippin; Aragorn, Legolas, and Gimli. Hmm, maybe I'll have to do that series myself. See, the sign of a good drabble: it makes me want to write my own. :-D

Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger -- Score: 3

I've often thought about Legolas remembering after everyone else is gone. The last death (Gimli's) would be particularly hard on him. I liked the phrase that remembrance is his destiny. It's an interesting phrase and seems to imply that he will live more in the past than in the present or the future. Definitely a sobering thought. Good emotional work.

Reviewed by: sulriel -- Score: 2

This is well done, excellent use of the one hundred words of a drabble. your word choices are pointed and specific and pack a lot of meaning in each thought. well done!!

Reviewed by: Dwimordene -- Score: 2

I think the last line sums up Legolas' relation to his mortal friends nicely: "Grief is my burden; remembrance, my destiny". It goes well with "Immortal" and feels suitably elvish to me. Nice!

Reviewed by: Marigold -- Score: 2

Poor Legolas! I wonder if even Gandalf will stay, for I think that if he has any choice in the matter he will someday follow the others. Lots of emotion in this drabble.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower -- Score: 1

Pojgnant drabble. Legolas begins to count the cost of his friendship and love for mortals.

Reviewed by: elliska -- Score: 1

This is an all too true fact for Legolas and one that I always thought was very sad. You captured it well here.