Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards

Hesitation

Author: rhyselle
Nominator: rhyselle
2011 Award Category: Drabble: Elves

Story Type: Drabble : Length: True Drabble
Rating: General -- Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: Exactly 100 words Being caught between the call of the West and what one loves is a frightening thing. Elladan and Elrohir make their final choice. A true drabble written as a birthday gift for my twin.


Reviewed by: Kaylee Arafinwiel -- Score: 5

Rhyselle, The poor twins, forced to make such a choice. I think that in the end, it was the right one. I always enjoy your stories about Elladan and Elrohir, because you and Dancingkatz are quite well equipped to fit into their heads. Being twins with someone sounds like it can be advantageous, yet frightening and worrying, too...especially for identical twins, the sense of Self, and self worth, can probably be hard to work out. All this evoked in so few words... you have mastered the drabble as an art form. Most excellently well done, meldanya!

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel -- Score: 4

This drabble is wonderful. I love how the author leaves the reader hanging until the final moment, as it adds so much drama and tension to the scene, which by necessity is so very short. Additionally, the author's intentional lack of names is an interesting touch. Tolkien often refers to twins (no matter which pair) as a single entity, and by not singling out either Elrohir or Elladan, the pieces takes on a very interesting quality. A wonderful drabble, full of emotion and promise.

Reviewed by: cairistiona -- Score: 4

I must be honest and admit that I never would have thought the topic of Elladan and Elrohir's choice could be adequately handled within the limitations of a drabble, but rhyselle has happily proven me wrong! My heart leapt into my throat when whichever twin (we're not told) looked back at Middle-earth. Would he stay? Would they be sundered? I held my breath until the end... and that is the mark of a story well written.

Reviewed by: Oshun -- Score: 4

My heart was in my throat until I reached the very end of this. You caught me up and held me in the anxiety of the moment. I have often thought about this question. And I have always had my own favorite position on it, which is that the last set of elven twins in Tolkien's legendarium is not separated, from one another or from their parents in the end. Call me a sentimentalist, but I do like a happy ending and Tolkien really deals them out stingily for my favorite. Thank you for sharing this lovely little drabble.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene -- Score: 3

A number of authors have taken up the question of the final fate of Elrond's sons, and Rhyselle's drabble, which could be from either brother's perspective, is a lovely addition to the genre. It builds around the suspense of a backward glance, and the result I'll leave to the reader to discover. Nicely wrought!

Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon -- Score: 3

A wonderful look at the final decision of Elrond's sons to take ship for Valinor. The author's decision not to identify the narrator by a name works quite well, underscoring the closeness of the bond between the twins. I loved the tension of that choice, the other twin looking back at the Tower Hills. And I cheered at the triumphant tone of the last line.

Reviewed by: Rivergift -- Score: 3

Lovely little piece building good tension and strongly showing the bond between the twins. Not identifying the point of view was a good stylistic choice, and I found I could imagine either one in that situation.

Reviewed by: Darkover -- Score: 2

This story makes the reader hold his or her breath, which is quite a feat, as it is a drabble and therefore short. Very well written and a pleasure to read.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower -- Score: 2

To so successfully capture such a pivotal moment in the lives of Elladan and Elrohir in 100 words is the mark of a great drabblist! I love that we do not know which is which.

Reviewed by: Liadan -- Score: 2

The choice of Elladan and ELrohir is revealed at last. It seems that even the Peredhil twins could not be certain that they would both make the same decision.