Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards

Sercemait

Author: Aerlinnel
Nominator: Marta
2005 Award Category: Races/Places: Elves: First Age - Honorable Mention

Story Type: Vignette : Length: N/A
Rating: PG-13 -- Reason for Rating: battle gore, character death
Summary: The third Kinslaying, as seen from the other side. What royals don't tell plebeians won't hurt them...right?


Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger -- Score: 7

The bewilderment these elves felt at the coming of the Noldor was frightening. And saddening. The kinslayings were certainly terrible events, but I don't think I had ever realized the full horror until seeing it through the eyes of one who had no idea what was happening or why. I loved how the story started large but then narrowed until it was only about a single elf and his horror at what he was being forced to do. I have to wonder if the refugees of Doriath told those of Gondolin nothing about what drove them from Doriath, but the confusion was so effective that I can forget about that. And the almost calm way in which either Amrad or Amras avenged the other was chilling. And a very sobering kind of mercy, too. Also sobering was how much this elf now welcomed death, particularly when many of the elves had lived with this for years now. I can only imagine what the horror has done to them.

Reviewed by: Leaward -- Score: 6

A powerful look into a young, and reasonably innocent, elf's perspective of being drawn into a battle and the discoveries of exactly what that means. The feeling of the spear as it punctures the body bringing home to him exactly what he has done was very well done, as was his end. I also like that even within the killing that the characters show mercy, and understanding, and that seems to bring an even more 'elven' characteristic to the entire story. Very rarely have I seen a first person present tense that works for me, but this one does -- and I think it needs to be for it to hold the emotion and strength that is needed to show how a warrior thinks in battle. And the fact that it is a young elf, one who has never had to battle before makes it that much more poignant.

Reviewed by: Marta -- Score: 3

I have never been in battle, but I imagine the confusion this story's narrator exhibits is fairly characteristic; this story also did a commendable job of getting across his naivete and his anger. I also liked how you weaved in conflicts between the Noldor and more "primitive" Elves such as the story's narrator.

Reviewed by: Larian Elensar -- Score: 2

Eww...yuck. This was so sad! And graphic. Though it was something that needed to be told, I guess. I mean, so much is written from the Noldor perspective, good to see it from the other side.