Walls and Gates

Author: Adina ATL

Nominator: Marta

2005 Award Category: Genres: Romance

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Short Story

Rating: PG  ✧  Reason for Rating: adult themes

Summary: After completing the Doors of Durin, Narvi travels to Ost-in-Edhil at Galadriel's "request" to help with the building of that city's defenses. This is a sequel.

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Reviewed by: Marta  ✧  Score: 9

This piece was very nice. In some ways it was better than the prequel -- there were more details than Elven culture (and Dwarvish culture for tht matter), which I really liked. And I loved the cast of characters, especially Cadie. She was delightful and I would love to see more of her. But the emotional impact of Narvi's falling out with Galadriel seemed cut short. I felt like I needed more to get her (Narvi) from her very realistic anger at being manipulated (so she thought) by Galadriel, to her willingness to stay in Ost-in-Edhil. It seems like she just caves, and it seemed out-of-character for a Dwarf, especially a Dwarf of the character that you created throughout this pair of stories. I also wanted more. Maybe there should be another piece in the series (if there isn't already -- if there is, please let me know where I can find it!) I would love to see the relationship between Celebrimbor and Celeborn explored in more depth. And Celebrimbor's relationship to the Moriquendi, there seemed to be a lot of material you could develop through that. Would Noldor or Moriquendi be more willing to reside permanently in Narvi's fortress, and how would that affect the other's impression of them? And Galadriel and Narvi... they need to rebuild that relationship. Just a thought. *evil grin*

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 8

A worthy successur to "Opening Doors"! The glimpses of Elven life, of the rifts between the Noldor and the Quendi, all get filtered through a Dwarf's eyes, a Dwarf who has eyes for the stone she must shape but not, at first, for the partnership she must form with Galadriel. This is a very unusual sort of romance, since in fact, the romance as such has already occurred in the previous story. The unusual nature of this courtship, which is forgotten as soon as dreams fade, only to be rediscovered at an inopportune moment, makes it hard to track, but still satisfying as politics and affection and temptation are worked out in a strange city, which itself seems hardly formed and as new as this alliance between Galadriel and Narvi. Beyond that, Rohirriel the elf captain was a lovely original character who gave us a look at what would later seem to be quintessential elven ways. The first-person narrative is well-handled, and by the end, one has a glimpse of the defiant hope that the Last Alliance would raise against the Shadow of the East. Well done, Adina ATL, and thank you for a wonderful story.

Reviewed by: nerwen_calaelen  ✧  Score: 2

An interesting tale. You touch on many issues, butskim ove some of them very lightly. Your characterisations are veryinteresting. I expect i would get more out of the tale if I know the background but even without that I enjoyed reading it.