Guilt

Author: Eokat

Nominator: Leaward

2005 Award Category: Genres: Drama (includes Angst) - Honorable Mention

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Short Story

Rating: G  ✧  Reason for Rating: n/a

Summary: An heir to the throne of Rohan is imminent. For its King this is a time of reflection....and guilt

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Reviewed by: Rhapsody  ✧  Score: 10

Guilt is a story that touched me deeply. Eokat takes me as a reader with her words, description’s into Éomer’s world that in this short story is clouded by worry, fear and a huge guilt regarding the love of his life: Lothiriel. You can see how Éomer slowly grows into the role of his life: that of a father. I like the moments of which Eokat chose to write the flashbacks: those are most certainly the key moments of every single mother and father to be. There are so many fabulous lines, words or moments that made the story very special: from the moment where Éomer swells from pride himself when Lothiriel starts to show, or the flashback where he worries if he indeed doesn’t hurt his beautiful life when they make love, or the moment where Lothiriel muses that another child would be great as well. The thought only makes Éomer wonder if he ever is able to go through this guilt trail again. In that respect, Eokat shows her extraordinary writing talent: she brings the story to full circle in the most natural way, without forcing the characters or plot over all. I do have to admit that I hope for a sequel where Eokat writes about Lothiriel’s experience of becoming a mother. But, let’s be honest: this is about the birth of a newborn father who has gone through an ordeal most fathers has faced. In that respect: this is a excellent story Eokat and thank you for writing it.

Reviewed by: Leaward  ✧  Score: 7

A humorous look into Eomer's point of view when Lothiriel is delivering their child that is masterfully done by Eokat. The author seems to have a natural insight into the Rohir King's mind and character and I can see this being a real reaction to the impending event. Lines like "tried to wrap his pregnant wife in down" and Lothiriel's quip about how much Rohirric she knew (something I find in common with my own characters ... the women do tend to pick up on their men's cursing.) Once again, Eokat has taken a single event and turned it into a wonderful story, filled with emotion and detail that stays with the reader. The short flashbacks allow a glimpse of how Eomer thinks he is coping, and bears the 'guilt' of the title for the wonderful event. I have no doubt he will take all the credit that it is a son his wife has born.

Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger  ✧  Score: 3

Sweet and tender. I was a little disjointed by the flashbacks at first, but as they continued, they began to feel quite natural. By the end, I enjoyed them very much. I think they showed the progression of Lothiriel's pregnancy quite well, and I had a good deal of sympathy for poor Eomer by the end.

Reviewed by: Larian Elensar  ✧  Score: 2

Sometimes I think those really strong types, like Eomer, lose it the worst when they have to go through something like their wives having babies. Well done.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 2

This story hovers between amusement and angst, with both coming mostly at Éomer's expense as he waits through his wife's first labor. It's a bit uneven for my taste, but it has its charm.

Reviewed by: sulriel  ✧  Score: 2

A wonderful portrayal of Eomer King, as a father and husband. We so often seem him as a warrior or a lover that his other strengths are overlooked. Good job!

Reviewed by: nerwen_calaelen  ✧  Score: 1

An interesting view, although some of the grammer and punctuation made it rather har to follow easily.