How I Wish

Author: Dawn Felagund

Nominator: Larner

2010 Award Category: Genres: Poetry: Drama - Third Place

Story Type: Poetry  ✧  Length: N/A

Rating: Teen  ✧  Reason for Rating: Discussion of non-graphic violence.

Summary: Left behind by Finrod, Amárië considers the paradox of her situation: her wish for his return and the only means by which her wish would be granted. A sonnet.

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Reviewed by: Larner  ✧  Score: 10

For Amarie, there is but one means by which she might hope to have the one she loves return to her. It is a bitter thing, to know that only should the one she loves die might she have hope to hold him once more. Yet, for those of the Noldor who remained behind in Aman as most of their kindred followed Feanor back to the Mortal Lands, those who have heard the terms offered in the Doom of Mandos, what other hope might they know if they are to behold ever again those who left them so? I found this a most moving lament, that of the one who is bereft of the one she loves, yet must wait for horrors she can barely imagine but that she nonetheless foresees for him to return to her. She foresees the cold he must endure, the imprisonment he is likely to know at one time or another. One feels the pain she knows, anticipating that he must in time know these things if he is ever to return to her undying love. A terrible thing--to have to hope for such pain to overwhelm the one she loves more than life itself in order to hold him to herself once more! Sad, but hopeful nonetheless. Dawn's writing is filled with poignancy, and as short as the poem is, still it is capable of stirring emotion and causing deep thought. I was proud to nominate this poem, and offer it as an example of how word choice can move the heart of the reader.

Reviewed by: Celeritas  ✧  Score: 4

Finrod/Amarie has to be one of my favorite pairings from the Silmarillion, mostly because of Finrod. Which is why I loved Dawn's take on Amarie's side of the story, saying so much in fourteen lines that fit the Shakespearean mode of the sonnet (and the scansion, and the rhyme scheme) so impeccably well. The final couplet, with all the contradictions of being in love with an Exile, is as swift and sharp as a guillotine's blade. Sometimes less really is more.

Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 3

I confess I had to read your reply to another reviever before I understood what this poem is about, but that is mostly due to my Silmarillion ignorance. Regardless, I enjoyed the music and the rhythm of this peom very much.

Reviewed by: Cathleen  ✧  Score: 3

This is beautiful. Even though I am not well-versed in the world of the Silm, I still find the flow of this poem so lyrical and touching, like a much-loved song or the touch of a feather against a cheek, and even though it's sad, it is uplifting as well.