Watching Thoughts

Author: Alawa

Nominator: Dwimordene

2005 Award Category: Genres: Romance: Poetry - Second Place

Story Type: Poem  ✧  Length: N/A

Rating: G  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: While Aragorn went forth again to danger and toil, Arwen remained in Rivendell and from afar watched over him in thought

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Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 7

Another set of poems that admirably suit the characters whose poems they are. This time, it's Aragorn who has the villanelle, and as hope and determination tilt against despair and resignation, the spareness of the form becomes the vehicle for the expression of the stripped-down dignity of a Ranger. No flights of fancy, nor need of embellishment, here, and once again, the repeating lines both fit the form and advance the poem's content. Arwen's poem, by contrast, is filled with long sentences and thoughts that trail through several lines. She has the time to let a fuller and more detailed working out of her feelings and hopes emerge, and the poem reflects this. But at the end of each stanza, she returns to the choice she's made that puts a stop, as it were, to those meandering reflections, or rather, completes them with a brevity appropriate to the mortal timeframe she's about to step into.

Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger  ✧  Score: 7

Absolutely brilliant use of the villanelle for the first poem. The two repeating lines seem to weave together thoughts on both love and duty and how one can sustain the other and vice versa. It's a great way to display a multi-layered Aragorn, and it shows how his devotion to Arwen kept him firm in his duty and how he used his duty to show his devotion. Very nice give and take. The second poem is a study in contrasts, and that includes contrasts within the poem itself as well as its contrast with the first poem. It's so very different, and it definitely reminds readers that Arwen does not hail from the same race that Aragorn does. Not really, anyway. Beautiful imagery throughout, and there's a very timeless quality to Arwen's thoughts. Great study in characterization and in the motivations that drive these two.

Reviewed by: Marta  ✧  Score: 3

Another set of poems that is nice to read. I like how you captured Aragorn's and Arwen's love in a period that few seem to touch on, because there isn't much (canonically) to touch on. But these waiting years are in many ways the most interesting. Well done.

Reviewed by: Llinos  ✧  Score: 2

Two romantic poems, a villanelle from Aragorn that shows how he knows Arwen's thoughts are with him whilst Arwen, as if to prove the thought, sits and sews and thinks of him. I especially liked the repetition in this at the end of each stanza.

Reviewed by: nerwen_calaelen  ✧  Score: 1

A nice pair of poems that seem to catch each speaker's 'voice' well.