Heavenly Dance

Author: Ellynn

Nominator: Robinka

2011 Award Category: Ficlet: Elder Days

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Ficlet

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: After long months of loneliness and separation, Tilion will finally be close to his beloved Arien for a few moments. (Ficlet of about 850 words)

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Reviewed by: Himring  ✧  Score: 10

It is perhaps no wonder that Ellynn, with her passionate interest in astronomy, would be the one to turn a not very well-known passage about the Sun and the Moon into a piece of fiction (Arien and Tilion seem generally to be more popular with illustrators than with writers of fan fiction). But although the piece was inspired by an actual astronomical event, an eclipse of the sun in January of this year, this is by no means an astronomical treatise! It is a true piece of romance. Ellyn has taken Tilion's love for Arien seriously, not just as a mythological explanation of the moon's appearance and wayward course. She describes Tilion's longing for Arien in intense and lyrical prose: his adoration for Arien, how he makes the most of their short periods of contact while nevertheless aware that she does not fully return his love. (She does not burn him; in Ellynn's version, they are actually able to speak to each other and even, briefly, touch hands.) While the eclipse of the sun in mythology is often an ominous portent, here it is made to signify the triumph of love over loneliness and is perceived as such by elves below--an occasion for a first kiss! This ficlet is not only to be commended for its original choice of subject, but also well worth reading for the quality of its writing.

Author response: Aww, thank you so much for your kind words. I am so happy you like this. :)

Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 4

Dear Ellynn, I think it is excellent how you make use of your love for astronomy in writing fanfiction. To think of the solar eclipse as a meeting of, ha, star-crossed lovers is something that fits so very well into the world of Tolkien. You have rendered this scene beautifully in a language that flows well and conveys the whole melancholy resignation of the protagonist. Well done.

Author response: I can't help it - I often think of astronomy and I see its motives in everyday's world - writing included. :) Thanks for your praise. :)

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 3

This is wonderful sort of brief, stream-of-consciousness glimpse into a very rarely explored character. I enjoyed the turmoil the author brought into this, and the artistic Middle-earth spin on a naturally occurring phenomenon.

Author response: Thanks for the review! :)

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 3

Very sweet! The obliviousness of Tilion in love to the effects of his closest pass to Arien on all those dwelling below is nicely described, and I like that his love inspires other lovers instead of fear.

Author response: Thanks, I am glad you like it! :)