Wind Song

Author: Erulisse

Nominator: Robinka

2011 Award Category: Character Study: General

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Ficlet

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: Before the seas flood Beleriand, the wind takes a last visit to the destroyed hidden city of Gondolin.

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Reviewed by: Himring  ✧  Score: 5

A lovely idea--the wind, personified, says farewell to the ruins of Gondolin, and in its memories briefly Gondolin lives once more before being buried under the waves. The wind remembers the daily lives of the Gondolindrim, their hopes and griefs, it remembers the destruction of the city, and it is the last to leave. The piece is well structured, and the description is evocative, with neat little touches, picking out details here and there to hint at the whole. The wind could be interpreted as one of Manwe's messengers, but seems to be simply the wind, and, apart from the central presuppositions, the personification itself and its empathy with the Gondolindrim, its voice remains in character throughout.

Author response: I love Gondolin, just in case you couldn't tell - LOL. I love Gondolin, all of the public and private places, and the fact that my love for this hidden city came through for you in this small story thrills me. Thank you so very much for your kind review. - Erulisse (one L)

Reviewed by: Elleth  ✧  Score: 5

Trust Erulisse, a fairly new author who only began writing earlier this year, to try and capture the wind of the Echoriath paying a last visit to Gondolin. In this short ficlet, she shows her apitude for description at its best, painting a strong and vivid picture of the splendour of the fallen city before it is claimed by the sea in the destruction of Beleriand. Since this is more of a mood piece that doesn't feature much plot, I'm finding it hard to latch on many aspects to review without pointing out this or that glowing turn of phrase and that acute observation - the ficlet is full of them, so I might just end up quoting the entire thing, which is admittedly beside the point. You'd best go and read it yourselves.

Author response: Elleth, thank you so much for your extremely kind words. I really loved "Wind Song" and I am delighted that you also did. The idea of taking a completely different tack - that of the wind - to explore this city that I love so much was a bit of a twist for me. I'm delighted that it worked for you :-) - Erulisse (one L)

Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon  ✧  Score: 4

A novel look at the end of Gondolin - the very end, before the waves bury it along with almost all of Beleriand at the end of the First Age. The narrator is the wind, come one last time to breeze through the ruined white city it has known in happier days. The use of such a powerful and timeless narrator works well here, giving the reader the poignancy of a nature-spirit who has seen Gondolin from its peak to its terrible fall. Good descriptions of mingled beauty and destruction.

Author response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I adore Gondolin and I hope it came through clearly in this short look before it was buried beneath the waves forever. - Erulisse (one L)

Reviewed by: Larner  ✧  Score: 4

Erulisse is new to the fandom, but how well she captures the mixture of joy and grief that is at the heart of Tolkien’s world. This last examination of the ruins of Gondolin by the Wind is a perfect blend of imagery and rhythm, a paean to the lost city of Turgon that makes me wish I could walk there myself! Poignant and joyful at the same time, this is not to be missed.

Author response: You make me blush, your comments are so very kind. I love Gondolin, and would have liked nothing so much as exploring each corner, even as the wind has the opportunity to do here. It is rather like caressing a loved one before bidding them good-bye forever. Thank you so much for your words. - Erulisse (one L)

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 3

The viewpoint taken here is interesting - it's fun to play with perspectives that aren't tied down to the usual body-forms and see what comes out. A bittersweet last look at poor Gondolin - poor wind, which must play its part in burying it!

Author response: The joy of the wind in exploring places it had loved and, in its own way, revisiting souls who had inhabited the ruins of Gondolin was a fun perspective to try out. I loved playing in the corners and whooshing over the walls. The fact that the wind will soon play a part in the inundation of this fabled city is one of the many tragedies that wind will experience over time. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I appreciate your taking the time and effort. - Erulisse (one L)

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 3

In this piece, Erulisse offers her readers a very powerful personification of the wind. I love the detail she put into her descriptions, and the lyrical nature of the wind's narrative is elegant and poignant. This is a strong piece of writing, and I love how the wind has its own personality that is infused into the descriptions of lost Gondolin.

Author response: Thank you so much for reviewing Wind Song. In this small piece, the wind takes on my personal sorrow at never having the opportunity to see this most wondrous of Elven cities in Middle Earth. I am very pleased that it evoked a response from you and hope that you will continue to read and review my stories as I post them on various archives.

Reviewed by: Ellynn  ✧  Score: 2

Erulisse gives us a very unusual POV here - the wind - but it works perfectly. Her descriptions of the wind and its thoughts are so poignant, sad and beautiful. So well done.

Author response: I appreciate your review of "Wind Song" so very much. I loved looking at my favorite city of Middle Earth from a different perspective and was delighted to learn that it also worked well for you. Thank you so very much. - Erulisse (one L)