Upon the Pebbled Shore
2008 Award Category: Genres: Drama: Final Partings
Story Type: Story ✧ Length: Short Story
Rating: General ✧ Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: Upon the pebbled shores of the sea stand two brothers. But as the tide begins to turn the sound of the gulls will choose their futures. (This story is on HASA under my Author name of Peregrin Ionad. but I am the same person....I just used Peregrin Ionad first, and have never thought to change it, as I don't usually post fics as Aranegoldenflower and when I do I always make sure people realise it is the same person!)
Reviewed by: Ignoble Bard ✧ Score: 5
A beautifully touching piece presenting the final parting between Elladan and Elrohir upon an unnamed shore. The descriptions are poetic and the parting of the twins bittersweet. Its difficult to imagine the two apart but not entirely surprising considering the decision made by their father and his brother, Elros. I liked that Legolas also made an appearance to wish them farewell since he knows, probably better than anyone, the pull of the sea and the difficulty of leaving the only homeland he had known. This vignette could have been mawkish but it has just the right balance of emotion and character interplay, while the final line is understated and elegantly poignant.
Reviewed by: Keiliss ✧ Score: 4
Elrond and Elros chose to join themselves to different kindreds, it is part of canon, I have known it for years, and yet the suggestion that Elronds sons might make the same choice feels somehow shocking. Very sad, but also in a way it does them far more honour than all those stories that refuse to allow they might have been individual enough to have chosen separately and have sufficient respect for one another to accept the final divide.
Reviewed by: Virtuella ✧ Score: 3
This is a sensitive, atmospheric piece of writing that brings home the extend of the choices Elrond's children had to face. The framing is a beautiful touch. I enjoyed reading this story.
Reviewed by: Larner ✧ Score: 3
A rather eerie tale, and with a definite poetic sound to it with its repetition of the title phrase thoughout, as two who'd never thought to be parted do, now unto the remaking of Arda. Subtle, poignant, sad, and yet right, somehow. Again, well worth the read.
Reviewed by: crowdaughter ✧ Score: 3
A sad, deep piece with a very poignant end, powerful impact and a lot of insightful remarks. It is a tragic thought that in the end that should have come to be their fate, too, but it is also a very likely outcome; and I loved the way the author introduced the different choices, here. Great piece, very well executed!
Reviewed by: viv ✧ Score: 3
I like how you framed the Moment, wrapping the angsty middle with a poetic beginning and ending, symmetrical and lyrical and very very sad. But how appropriate when you're writing about twins: bookends and mirrors of each other. Poor Peredhil to have to make such a choice, and even more so for twins. You've captured the moment nicely.
Reviewed by: Ainaechoiriel ✧ Score: 1
Sad to think the twins should part, but intriguing as it ties to their father and his twin.