'Peering in the water as the dark eve fell, I caught him, Gollum.'

Author: Avon

Nominator: Dwimordene

2005 Award Category: Books/Time: The Lord of The Rings: Drabble - First Place

Story Type: Drabble  ✧  Length: True Drabble

Rating: PG  ✧  Reason for Rating: Generally dark atmosphere.

Summary: Drabble. Aragorn captures Gollum.

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Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger  ✧  Score: 7

I loved the confused, disoriented feeling this drabble portrays. Aragorn's thoughts were wonderfully clipped and bewildered. He's definitely spent far too much time in Gollum's company, and I doubt that Gollum has made it easy for him. But Aragorn, being Aragorn, is reading more into this than just an unruly prisoner who has become a wearisome burden. He's contemplating the effects of the Ring and he's looking at just how much it's twisted Gollum. And then he's applying it to himself, which gives the drabble a whole new meaning, especially if you think about captives and captors. Fascinating look into Aragorn's mind, and good choice of form in which to express his thoughts. Drabbles are very well suited for this kind of writing, especially when the author is as good as Avon is.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 6

Avon makes great use of a line from the books as her title, allowing the rest of the drabble to stand as an elaboration of it. Gollum's schizophrenic nature infects his captor, who finds himself caught in a dizzying relationship with his prisoner. Who is really driving whom? Aragorn ought to be the dominant end of this relationship, yet he isn't, seeing himself as both captor and prisoner. There's no point of balance between them, and Aragorn finds himself unable to escape Gollum, who invades every sense, and unlocks a rather indeterminate fear. It's clearly connected to the Ring, but at the same time, what precisely is it about the Ring, as it manifests in Gollum, that Aragorn fears? It's unclear, and I think it's the more effective for that openness. Well done!

Reviewed by: Marta  ✧  Score: 4

Oh, very well done. You have some very nice turns of phrase here such as "Through darkness and mire I drive him; through forest and briar he drives me". In the end who is exactly whose prisoner is a mute point, for they are both in bondage to Mordor because they cannot dow hat they would like. Aragorn would rather be in Rivendell, I am sure, never battling against the dark. Alas, fate is never truly kind. ;-)

Reviewed by: Nancy Brooke  ✧  Score: 3

Excellent. Even the brevity of the form communicates how little power of abstract thought Aragorn has left in this journey; he's become just Gollum's capture with limited articulated feelings. You really capture the whole experience - every sense and impression.

Reviewed by: Aliana  ✧  Score: 3

A chilling account of pursuit: the stream-of-consciousness phrasing was appropriate and well-done. My favorite aspect of this drabble is the way in which Aragorn's obsession with Gollum seems to border upon the intensity of Gollum's obsession with a certain object.

Reviewed by: nerwen_calaelen  ✧  Score: 3

An intreaging view of Aragorn and Gollum. It catches the darkness of Gollum but the last line adds the knowledge that it is not him that is so bad and the the fate is not of his choosing. This adds an extra layer to the perception of how perceptive Aragorn is.

Reviewed by: Lindelea  ✧  Score: 2

Powerful use of varied senses: sight, smell, hearing, touch. Good bit of foreshadowing--what the Ring has made him, and what the Ring could do to any who tried to claim It.

Reviewed by: annmarwalk  ✧  Score: 2

An insightful study of Aragorn, his fate bound to that of Gollum, as he ponders the consequences of possesion of the Ring, and receives an unwelcome insight into his own possible future. Spare, powerful, as perfect as a drabble can be.

Reviewed by: Rabidsamfan  ✧  Score: 2

This is an eerie drabble, giving a great sense of the mutual discomfort Aragorn and Gollum suffer during the time when Gollum was Aragorn's prisoner, and also giving us a clearer idea of why Aragorn had the good sense to refuse the Ring.

Reviewed by: SilverMoonLady  ✧  Score: 1

Shiveringly intense! Very evocative, using all the senses; well done!

Reviewed by: Dreamflower  ✧  Score: 1

A chilling and atmospheric stream-of-consciousness drabble. Powerful.