I Will Take It

Author: agape4gondor

Nominator: Fiondil

2009 Award Category: Genres: Ficlets - Honorable Mention

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Ficlet Series

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: For the HASA Tiny AU challenge. Someone other than Frodo thinks He should take It after the Council of Elrond. Chaper One - One thousand words per MS Word. Repercussions follow the taking and another Elf becomes an anethma. Chapter Two - One thousand words per MS Word.

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Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger  ✧  Score: 8

In the books, we don't often get to see the effect of the Ring from the POV of the one being tempted. The exception is Sam when he briefly carries It, and in that, we only see the Ring's initial (and rather clumsy) attempts at temptation. Had Sam continued carrying the Ring, I think we would have seen a more subtle seductress. And since Frodo only rarely has the POV in the second and third book, there's no real chance to see how the Ring works on him. This makes stories like this very intriguing, and I think Agape4gondor has done a fantastic job of capturing the subtle workings of the Ring over time. The temptation begins slowly and subtly, twisting memories of the past until they represent a different kind of truth for this poor, unnamed elf. Initially, he's stayed by his respect for Elrond, but that, too, becomes a problem. And here the Ring shows true cunning, because it doesn't try to destroy that respect. Rather, it uses it so that the elf seems to believe he is saving Elrond and all of Imladris. A very chilling account and a very plausible AU. Beautifully written!

Reviewed by: Súlriel  ✧  Score: 5

I started reading this, having no expectation, no clue as to who it would be -- and found myself enthralled. It's the extraordinary fic that can leave me both in the dark and yet fulfilled. My mind kept searching as I read, trying to place this character, and of course I couldn't. I have to admit now, that the unnamed mystery character that can be so annoyingly common in this fandom is one of my pet peeves, but I also have to admit that you have made it work, and very well. I think this particular fic works better this way and I did giggle at your author's note.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower  ✧  Score: 5

What a chilling AU! The Ring managed to find one willing to listen to its insidious whispers in the very household of Elrond. The first part is chilling enough, as we see the nameless Elf beginning to succumb, at first slowly, and then more quickly, as if he were being drawn into a whirlpool. Poor Frodo, trusting to the friendship and hospitatlity of the Elves is betrayed. The second part is even more striking-- we understand the depths of the betrayal through the eyes of Elladan, as he and his brother pursue the traitor. The fact that the traitor remained nameless makes the story even more powerful.

Reviewed by: Fiondil  ✧  Score: 4

This short piece is a chilling read and Agape does an excellent job of keeping up the suspense and the sense of horror one feels as we see how insidious the Ring works on those who are within its presence and the consequences when someone heeds its words, not only on that particular person but on others as well. Told from the viewpoints of two different characters we see what might have happened. In the end, all one can do is weep for them both. Well done, Agape!

Reviewed by: InweSaralonde  ✧  Score: 4

A well-crafted story that left one wondering who it was that tried to kidnap Frodo. It showed how his mind was affected by the One Ring, giving the story a slightly chilling feel to it with regards how easily it happened. Also Elladan's sense of despair where he regarded himself as a 'kinslayer' came through well at the end, even though he had perfect justification for slaying the elf in order to save the Halfling.

Reviewed by: Larner  ✧  Score: 4

This is such a tragic might-have-been tale, in which treachery and evil occur when an unnamed Elf from Imladris chooses to make himself the Ringbearer, although there is no indication this one ever intended to seek the road to Mount Doom. Ah, quite the contrary! A fascinating look at the corruption of an Elf by the Ring, and the grief such a situation could well have spawned. Agape is very good at presenting us with alternatives to Tolkien's story, and she does not disappoint us in this one.

Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 3

This is a well-written and very chilling tale of how the power of the Ring - or maybe the lure of dominance in general? - can corrupt the mind. I found it an interesting and worthwhile read.

Reviewed by: Linaewen  ✧  Score: 3

A frightening tale of betrayal in a place that should have been a safe haven for Frodo. But the Ring knows no such boundaries. The ending is poignant, dealing with the reality one must sometimes face in attempting to achieve a rescue.

Reviewed by: WendWriter  ✧  Score: 3

This is awesome! The twist is excellent and the tale itself is a great pleasure to read. I love a good AU. I have some minor nitpicks, which I hope you will find useful. Please note that they do not detract from the quality of the story, and my intention is merely to polish gold. [Men are not |trust worthy| TRUSTWORTHY; I discovered that when Isildur kept the Ring against Lord Elrond’s counsel. Prior to that, I had little experience with their race and no love FOR THEM. Though the line of Húrin was trusted by many (the line of Húrin died out when his son Túrin married his own sister and they both committed suicide), I kept apart from them. I kept to those I knew and trusted. Did not Easterlings enter our lands, side with the Spawn of Morgoth, and battle against us? Now I was supposed to forget that treachery, that betrayal, and trust them, these short-lived, mindless beings. Close kin to Yrch, I call them. Though not openly. Nay, is not my lord…(add question mark, since this is a question)] This is a job well done. Thank you for posting it for us to enjoy. Happy writing!

Reviewed by: Sevilodorf  ✧  Score: 1

Interesting to see the story unfold from different viewpoints.