2008 Award Category: Genres: Poetry - Honorable Mention
Story Type: Poetry ✧ Length: N/A
Rating: General ✧ Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: Elrond bids farewell to his daughter Arwen as he prepares to leave Middle-earth.
Reviewed by: Imhiriel ✧ Score: 10
This is an incredibly moving, magical poem, full of sadness and joy. I don't have much knowledge of meters and forms, but I felt that the "uneven free verse" (for lack of a better term) was very appropriate in portraying Elrond's hesitation and his difficulties in expressing these so intimate thoughts and and feelings (especially if he is the guarded person I imagine him to be). The language is luminous and piercing, the images it evokes have a clarity to them like mountain air. In this way, they achieve two things at the same time which seem perhaps contradictory: they complement the emotions Elrond expresses palpably, his pride and love for his daughter, his very deep grief at the thought of losing her so irrevocably, his feeling of bereavement; they also stand in contrast with these melancholy thoughts by painting pictures of stars and flowers, light and joy. It shows a very intriguing aspect in the relationship between parents and children: that parents cherish and protect, but also gain a certain fragility in this, which the child, despite the reciprocal love, may not always consider in its search for self and self-realisation. There is also something that goes beyond the relationship between Elrond and Arwen, something that touches on all the wonders and the ephemeral nature of creation.
Reviewed by: Larner ✧ Score: 5
Armariel's free-verse is always evocative, always moving, always filled with a poignancy that draws the reader into the mood of the one whose voice is reflected in her carefully chosen images and reflected feelings. This farewell to his daughter by Elrond is a sparkling gem caught in shining links of words, and a poem that is as ever a joy to read and ponder. The image of her dancing barefoot on the shards of his heart, and his recognition that one day it will be her heart that lies there splintered while those who follow after do similarly is achingly beautiful. I hope others will read and delight in this offering as much as do I as we consider just how painful as well as fulfilling such love as these have known can be.
Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon ✧ Score: 4
A bittersweet poem from Elrond's point of view, encapsulating the joys and sorrows of fatherhood; and, in the case of Elrond, the special sorrow of knowing his daughter is leaving him forever and will, eventually suffer. In releasing Arwen to follow her heart and the choice she has made, Elrond knows he is letting her go to a fate that will bring pain as well as joy. But he knows that he cannot, and will not, hold her. Beautifully written, with remarkably descriptive imagery.
Reviewed by: Elleth ✧ Score: 4
My grasp of poetry is not that great, but I enjoyed this very much. The imagery is consistent and fitting (e.g. equalling Arwen with stars and the allusions to planets and the unierse is very much remindful of her name 'Undomiel - Evenstar), and Elronds sorrow at the inevitability of their separation and her daughter's ultimate fate becomes palbable. Well done.
Reviewed by: Dreamflower ✧ Score: 3
Powerful imagery, as Elrond muses on his only daughter, and the fate that has sundered him from her. I especially liked the metaphor ["My heart was a fragile pitcher"] that was extended ["Your feet now bleed as they step on my shards, yet your dance goes on, as I would have it so"] so beautifully. This author has a wonderful talent for poetry.
Reviewed by: Elena Tiriel ✧ Score: 3
Armariel's verse, "Elrond's Farewell", is from Elrond's point of view as he bids his daughter, who has chosen to stay in Middle-earth and become mortal, farewell before he sails for the Undying Lands. I enjoy the use of vivid language and metaphor in this poetry, and its rhythm is free, evocative of a maiden Arwen dancing freely. Very nicely done!