Bring Me That Horizon

Author: annmarwalk

Nominator: Branwyn (Lady Branwyn)

2009 Award Category: Genres: Humor - Honorable Mention

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Ficlet

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: Life has not been good to Bill the Pony, and he's not entirely convinced that things are about to improve.

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Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 5

This is a sweet little ficlet, in part humorous, but with its share of hardship in that first paragraph. The opening line is a scream, whose laughter leads into a recitation of the ills poor Bill the Pony suffers, and Annmarwalk puts us immediately right in his perspective from the first word. It is a convincing immersion, and we stay with him through his change of owners. Ann exploits the senses whenever she can, and this is no exception: touch, heat, and smell frame Bill's world and let us move in his skin for a little while. Give it a try - it's fun being a pony! Well done, Ann!

Reviewed by: Larner  ✧  Score: 5

A perfect tale of how ["Standstilldamnyou"] came to have a new master and a new name. I love how he came with both the scent of apples and danger, but that the former was stronger, strong enough, along with the innate respect and love he obviously showed, to overcome the scent of the latter, encouraging this pony to accept him and face whatever danger might be there. So wonderful, and to right for this beloved beast, one so many of us have come to love! As one who is following Lindelea's story of the same creature, this seems a perfect extension to his tale! Thank you so, Ann! And with such a new master as this, I can see this animal saying the title and meaning it!

Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger  ✧  Score: 5

I have to admit that I became rather horse-like myself when I first started reading this ficlet, because Bill's opinion of his former "name" prompted a very loud snort out of me. He was so upfront about it, and given his former owner, Bill probably heard that particular shout so many times that he deemed it to indeed be his name. And really, who knows if he had a name outside of that one? It could be that Sam was the first one to truly name the horse, and I like the difference in tone when Sam shows up. He really does know how to talk to Bill, and the contrast between Bill (the human) and Sam was well established.

Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon  ✧  Score: 4

A wonderful horsey piece - Bill's point of view is charming and very real, the grousing about his lack of a proper name and food tugs on the heartstrings of the reader without being maudlin. And the introduction of Sam, without naming him, is perfect. Bill's acceptance of the prospect of danger as a trade-off for the goodness promised by Sam's hands is beautifully written.

Reviewed by: Keiliss  ✧  Score: 4

Aww, I loved this. In a very few words, we met Bill the Pony and found he was a Thinking horse. He considered fate and the way of the world and asked the right philosophical questions, but all in a way that had me wondering if the Man he belonged to before Sam came along had looked after him at all if he got ill, if his hooves were attended to, what kind of work he was set... I'm glad things worked out for him in the end, he seemed a really nice boy. Kind of horse who deserves the odd sugar lump or apple, really..

Reviewed by: Red Lasbelin  ✧  Score: 4

This story made me smile so much. I really liked the voice of Bill, he had a warmth and simpleness to him that felt really right. He'd had a hard life, filled with neglect and hardship by a cruel master. It made me really happy when Sam came along, to treat him kindly, even if there was a higher chance of danger when he left the stables. Still, better than to be abused. Just - a really lovely little story, every word used well.

Reviewed by: Cairistiona  ✧  Score: 3

An absolutely delightful little ficlet... funny and sweet all at once. To hear the thoughts of Bill the Pony was a treat. ["I always felt Standstilldamnyou was not a proper name for a horse."] is probably one of the funniest opening lines I have ever read, and that he finds Sam smells of apples seems altogether right, somehow.

Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 3

Nice one! I liked that bit about the smell of apples being stronger than the smell of danger. It's a lovely way to think about Sam. As for the poor horses' original name: It reminded me of Terry Pratchett's book "Pyramids", where the camel is called Youbastard. ;-)

Reviewed by: obsidianj  ✧  Score: 3

This ficlet made me smile. In just a few words Bill, the pony, paints a picture of contrast between his former and new owner. If he only knew what would follow. I loved it that Bill knew that he had no proper name.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower  ✧  Score: 3

Oh Bill, you've no idea what your life is about to come to, or how famous you will be with your new name! That first line was perfect! I can just imagine how he thought that was his name. (Reminds me of an old Bill Cosby stand-up routine, about the names his father had for him and his brother Russell.)

Reviewed by: NeumeIndil  ✧  Score: 2

You've grasped my idea that some animals just know a kind human when they meet one very well. A nice piece.

Reviewed by: Linda Hoyland  ✧  Score: 2

A lovely warm hearted glimpse into what Bill the Pony might have been thinking of his change in circumstances. I loved the pony's hint of foresight and his common sense.

Reviewed by: Marta  ✧  Score: 2

This ficlet has a lovely feel to it - just like an old western, which is somehow simultaneously very fitting for Bill as well as very fun. Nice work, Ann. :-)