Your Sins Into Me
2011 Award Category: First Age and Prior: Feanorians - Second Place
Story Type: Story ✧ Length: Ficlet
Rating: Teen ✧ Reason for Rating: Mature Language/Themes
Summary: Shortly after the arrival of the main body of the Noldor in Middle-earth, Fingon the Valiant sets off alone to rescue his cousin and dearest friend Maedhros who has been captured by Melkor. This title is from the ballad "Silver and Cold" by A.F.I. (2003): "Your sins into me, oh, my beautiful one, Your sins into me."
Reviewed by: pandemonium_213 ✧ Score: 10
Quite some time ago, I was out for a nice perambulation in the woods near my (former) home. I was listening to my iPod, set to "shuffle." The song "Your Sins Into Me" by A.F.I. came on, and in one of those moments of fannish epiphanies, I realized that the song and lyrics reminded me very much of Oshun's Maitimo and FindekÃ¡no. I shared the video with her, with some hesitancy on my part because I wasn't sure she'd like the genre. But oh, those lyrics! And now, here they are realized in this ficlet, which finds a frustrated and increasingly desperate Fingon raging against ManwÃ«, and then bargaining with the Elder King with a nod to the lyrics of the song. Then, when a breeze arrives (but not a cool refreshing one), Fingon reaches for a shred of hope. In addition to delving deeply into FindekÃ¡no's thoughts (which have a neat stream-of-consciousness feel), Oshun paints a grim and forbidding landscape as the protagonist makes his way toward Thangorodrim. Fingon's rescue of Maedhros has always been one of my favorite bits in The Silmarillion, so Oshun's ficlet is a satisfying gapfiller with an authentic look at Fingon's feelings as he takes on the harrowing journey.
Author response: Thank you so much! You suggesting I listen to those lyrics was a real thrill for me. They are so beautiful.
Reviewed by: KyMahalei ✧ Score: 9
This is a delectable slice of the story.Oshun is managed to tease out a very real and believable moment in the saga of Findekano's search for Maitimo.. I like the tone she crafted with her setting, particularly the spot with the brittle black rock. she also does a great job of painting the desolate picture of the land in front of the mountains and gives a great sense of the largeness of the setting that Findekano must transverse. Findekano's character was also well executed. He comes across as a strong, confident character, not lacking a sense of humor. His likable nature makes me want to read more about him. Particularly endearing is Findekano's ability to consider only the positive memories of Maitimo, in spite of the events that lie between them. I also like the way that Oshun incorporate the lyrics of the song into the story. The thought of taking on the unforgiven sins of another is very sweet and proves to be yet another bit of evidence of Findekano's love for a friend. This is a gem of a story well worth the short read. I'd happily read more of this story if it ever became available.well done Oshun, you've done a great job!
Reviewed by: Russandol ✧ Score: 8
It's not often that a short piece like this can evoke such a wide range of emotions, but this is exactly what this ficlet does. Despair, hope, anger, sarcasm, fondness, compassion, resignation, love, we get to know FindekÃ¡no's mind as he treks towards Angband to search for his cousin. No grandiose words or gestures, just honest and believable thoughts, including the mundane practical matter of hunting to eat (because oshun's words are about the man, friend and lover, not the dazzling hero). His monologue or, more accurately, one-sided dialogue directed to ManwÃ«, is amazingly effective, combined with the journey's description and FindekÃ¡no's matter-of-fact reminiscing of the days before the Darkening, before chaos and danger prompted Maitimo to distance himself in order to protect his lover. The little detail about the rocks paints FindekÃ¡no's longing with a single, perfect brushstroke. Really, there is so much to enjoy within these few words! Just beautiful.
Author response: Thank you, Russa! The story meant a lot to me. Did not get a lot of attention. I am still so flattered that Pande told me the words to the song reminded her of my guys. Anyway, thanks I love the things you saw in it. I put hoping someone would notice. A reader like you makes writing worth the effort.
Reviewed by: Ignoble Bard ✧ Score: 6
This is a great little gapfiller of Fingon setting out to look for Maitimo during his captivity on Thangorodrim. His despair and frustration with Manwe is understandable but this short ficlet shows his grit and determination and reinforces just how much Maitimo means to him. The relationship between Fingon and Maitimo is one of the classic romances of fantasy literature and Oshun captures that love and willingness to sacrifice for each other these two characters have at their core. This is a lovely read and Iââ¬â¢m very glad to see it nominated this year. Oshun has a wealth of stories and character bios this season but this story holds a special appeal because I always like reading her Fingon and Maitimo stories.
Reviewed by: Lilith Lessfair ✧ Score: 6
This is really a model of the many wonderful things a short piece of fiction may accomplish. In this ficlet centered around Fingon's quest to rescue Maedhros, Oshun manages to paint a very evocative picture of the physical landscape into which Fingon travels and the emotional and mental landscape (if you will) of Fingon himself. I've always really enjoyed reading Oshun's Fingon. He is precisely the sort of character one would follow into battle because one would believe that he would never willingly leave a friend or comrade (much less a lover) behind. In this piece, she shows with great power the fear and worry he feels along with the tremendous compassion and love that compels him to continue, and she does so in the very clear and plain language that suits her version of Fingon very well.
Reviewed by: Lyra ✧ Score: 5
In not even 500 words, Oshun paints a vivid and detail picture of Fingon's character. His burst of anger while on the road to Thangorodrim was very believable, his memories of Maitimo - and the way he belatedly understands why Maedhros turned his back on him - were bittersweet, and I had to smile at his observation that Maedhros would've enjoyed studying the rocks. Fingon's final dry address to ManwÃ«: ["I do not know what has become of my manners recently. Let me restate my petition"] made me grin from ear to ear. I could so see Fingon in the desolation of that lava field, grim and sarcastic. A very nice, spot-on study of what may have been on Fingon's mind while he tried to find his beloved cousin.
Author response: Thanks for the fantastic review! Wow! Made my day!
Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel ✧ Score: 4
I liked very much how the author portrayed FindekÃ¡noââ¬â¢s thoughts through this short ficlet. The intensity of his emotion was not in doubt, and was quite believable. The one-sided conversation with ManwÃ« seemed very much in keeping with this particular version of FindekÃ¡noââ¬â¢s character, and I thought the faint touch of humor did a nice job of keeping things from being overwhelmingly dreary.
Author response: This is a tiny little piece, but it meant a lot to me. I am so grateful you reviewed it and please that the intensity reached you.
Reviewed by: elfscribe ✧ Score: 4
In this ficlet, we get a vivid glimpse of the increasingly forbidding landscape that Fingon the Valiant has to cross to reach Maedhros hanging on the cliff face and his understandable moment of fury at ManwÃ« for allowing Maedhros to suffer. The words of the song that the title of this ficlet is based upon are indeed quite apt in describing the deep and abiding love that Oshun has envisioned between Fingon and Maedhros. I really love her rendition of their story.
Reviewed by: Darkover ✧ Score: 3
A brief tale that is still impressive in how it is written. The story is quite emotionally descriptive as it depicts Fingon's frustration, at the Valar and the world in general, for his inability to find and save Maedhros. Perhaps there is no greater love than that of one who is willing to take a loved one's suffering on himself. This is well worth reading.
Author response: Thank you so very much for your kind comment. I am always happy when people appreciate the points that I most hope to communicate. It was a tiny thing, but an important story to me.
Reviewed by: Himring ✧ Score: 3
This story has Oshun's Fingon in it, and the only thing that is wrong with it is that it is not long enough. It isn't nearly long enough. It's barely enough to whet my appetite and consequently I'm suffering from the most hideous withdrawal symptoms. More Fingon next year, Oshun, please?
Reviewed by: SurgicalSteel ✧ Score: 2
An intriguing look into Fingon's state of mind as he journeys to Angband to rescue Maedhros from captivity. Grim, but not inappropriately so.
Author response: Thank you!!
Reviewed by: Liadan ✧ Score: 2
A wonderful story that gives an insightful glimpse into the complexities of Fingon's friendship with Maedhros.