On Amon Sûl

Author: Dreamflower

Nominator: Larner

2008 Award Category: Genres: Drama: Featuring Frodo or Sam - First Place

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Other Ficlet

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: After the stabbing on Weathertop, from Frodo's POV...

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Reviewed by: Larner  ✧  Score: 4

This is so much as I myself have envisioned the same scene, the bits the Master left out. From the fading and resurgence of awareness and sound to the wondering as to who might be dying--this is something Tolkien himself might have written (or intended to write). A fantastic gapfiller, and all too likely to have been true. Writing it from Frodo's own point of view was brilliant; and I, too, have envisioned him slamming down walls against the Ring and Its murmurings. Excellent.

Reviewed by: Alassante  ✧  Score: 4

I have never been a hobbity person but I really enjoyed this glimpse into the mind of Frodo after being stabbed on Amon Sul. The care shown by his friends and Strider, the concern about whether Strider could be trusted, and Frodo's internal battle with the ring was very touching. Dreamflower is a gifted writer and I really enjoyed his fiction. I think she personifies Frodo and the other hobbits rather well in this fiction.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 4

A nicely composed gap filler. Taking Frodo's perspective enables the Ring and its threat to come through very clearly and in a very personal form. Getting little snips of the discussions among the hobbits and Strider, discussions which had to have happened even if not given, gave a glimpse into the workings of this small and oddly composed group in an emergency. As always, Dreamflower's language recalls Tolkien's, helping to slot her narrative into the main story seamlessly.

Reviewed by: Imhiriel  ✧  Score: 4

The narration felt very immediate, very close. Frodo's state of mind was evoked cleverly by totally focussing on what he presently feels and perceives. There are no thoughts beyond the here-and-now. The ebb-and-flow of Frodo's awareness, how he comes closer to the "surface" and then is being dragged down again by the Ring's whispers, is presented well. I liked how the others' love and protectiveness shines through, even though Frodo is not always able to appreciate it.

Reviewed by: Linda Hoyland  ✧  Score: 4

This has always been a favourite part of the book of mine how Aragorn tries to heal Frodo after Weathertop and I love the way his warmth and strength are conveyed here,though all his efforts can do little to help poor Frodo.I also enjoyed seeing Frodo's perceptions of his Hobbit companions and how they tried to comfort him. I found the formatting rather difficult to read,but that is my only complaint about an excellent and beautifully written story which I'm pleased to have discovered through MEFA.

Reviewed by: obsidianj  ✧  Score: 4

This is a great gapfiller, for the stabbing at Amon Sul. I love the way you formatted it to underline Frodo's distance from the real world. The change between fading into the wraithworld and coming back to his friends is done with with great skill. And on top of everything the evil voice of the ring tries to subdue Frodo, although with not much success at this point.

Reviewed by: PipMer  ✧  Score: 3

What love is demonstrated amongst the three unwounded hobbits towards Frodo! Anything he needs, they are more than willing to give. And Frodo feels the same love towards them, which is proven by how much he resists the Ring when it threatens to claim them as well.

Reviewed by: nancylea  ✧  Score: 1

found your use of letter size very useful and inventive. good luck.