Dernhelm's Ride

Author: Lindelea

Nominator: unknown

2004 Award Category: Genres: Drama: Drabble - Second Place

Story Type: Fixed-Length Ficlet  ✧  Length: unknown

Rating: G  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: Cadence sung by Eowyn on the long ride to the fields of Pelennor.

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Review scores are not available for 2004.

Reviewed by: Larian Elensar  ✧  Score: N/A

Powerful. You got her desperation down in such few words. Well done.

Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger  ✧  Score: N/A

This drabble reminds me of nothing so much as free from poetry, but it is still clearly a drabble. Tight writing and good repetition of phrases pack a lot of emotion into a tiny space. Actually, this also reminds me of a chiasmus, with a spark of life in the middle as Eowyn shouts "ha," and then it dies away again. The final words are chilling.

Reviewed by: Marta  ✧  Score: N/A

Oh, nice! I particularly liked the first (and last) line, "A dead man's helm," etc. But the whole thing was very nice. I was on the marching band drum line in high school, and I can just hear us crying this out as we marched on the field. Very in character for Eowyn as well.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: N/A

Loved that first triad of lines. Lovely sense of repetition and obsessive focus-very suited to Éowyn.

Reviewed by: Ainaechoiriel  ✧  Score: N/A

Interesting, and quit grim, as suits her at that time, I think.

Reviewed by: ElenaTiriel  ✧  Score: N/A

Very nice, Lindelea! I liked the repetitive nature of your mentions of death -- particularly effective in a drabble. Also, I liked the repeated inclusions of canon quotes -- to death and the world's ending -- and -- the dogs roll on the floor with the brats. The last line was very powerful, as well.

Reviewed by: Fourth Moon  ✧  Score: N/A

I like the way the name "Dernhelm" is used instead of Eowyn: it gives some kind of reality to the person she assumes, as if he was a real person (and maybe he was, but I don't think so), given some substance by Eowyn's longing to be somebody who can ride to war without being sent back. That all of Dernhelm's equipment come from dead men gives "him" a kind of creepy touch. This is enhanced by the way the subject of being dead turns up in different ways: Aragorn on the Paths of the Dead, and Eowyn feeling as if she was dead. I also love Eowyn's disdain for the women's work she is expected to do - this disdain seems to be the most alive thing about her at that moment - and I think that line about the dogs playing with the brats alludes to something Gandalf said about the way Eowyn watched the dignity of the Edoras sink - wonderfully cleverly done!

Reviewed by: Marigold Cotton  ✧  Score: N/A

Eowyn's voice here is so hopeless and fell! It left me feeling that I saw into Eowyn's heart and her despair was laid bare.

Reviewed by: Llinos  ✧  Score: N/A

Very grim and in character