Here You Cannot Leave Me
2006 Award Category: Genres: Drama: Poetry - Second Place
Story Type: Poetry ✧ Length: Poem
Rating: PG ✧ Reason for Rating: Character Death
Summary: A poem about Arwen and Elessar's farewells.
Reviewed by: Rhapsody ✧ Score: 10
This is a heart rendering and beautiful poem about Arwen's grief over Aragorn's death. Even while I re-read it now, I have goose bumps crawling over my back and my arms. What I really love about this work is that it is not too much in words: it might appear small at a first glance, until you read it. This work is short and poignant: I simply love the cadence of this poem; every word carries so much grief and pain as if all hope is lost for her and even her children cannot compensate for that. It is almost like Arwen cannot speak no more because the grief chokes her, and every word is carefully chosen and used at the right moment as a testimony to their love and life. It feels as if you are there to see it happen and with this Alassante really shows the scene in question to you. When I reach the end of Alassantes work I am left with a haunting image of Arwens demise. But Arwen leaves so much more behind than that, bound to the mortal fate I can imagine that shortly after this she would leave to die on the hills of Cerin Amroth. In every word you can taste the bitterness Elrond predicted. Besides all of this: knowing and watching your loved one die is so had to catch in words and this author succeeded in that. Alassante: I would love to see more poetry coming from you; this work simply speaks volumes about your talent.
Reviewed by: Branwyn ✧ Score: 4
In this lovely poem, the parting of Arwen and Aragorn is written from Arwen's viewpoint. I especially liked the lines [Bound to love eternal/Cursed a mortal bride]; they sum up her predicament perfectly. (If I may make one small suggestion, you might want to put Arwen's thoughts in either italics or quotes to set them off from the rest of the piece.) The language has a restrained quality which is well-suited to the speaker and the subject. Nicely done!
Reviewed by: couchbroccoli ✧ Score: 4
This poem captures the anguish and despair of one who has sacrificed Her very life for the one she loved only to be left behind as he died first. Only at the end of Elessar's life did Arwen comprehend the weight of her father Elrond's foretelling. The author beautifully illustrates the utter sorrow and the loss of the will to live by one who should never have known the hand of death. Arwen's pain is tangible as the poem progresses toward it's sorrowful conclusion. I was deeply moved by this.
Reviewed by: elliska ✧ Score: 3
This is a very sad and touching poem of Arwen's thoughts and emotions as she faces Aragorn's mortality and her own. I particularly liked the last line--it is an image that captures the fading of an elf (even if she is now mortal) very well.
Reviewed by: Marta ✧ Score: 3
Touching, but in a very minimalist way that lets the reader fill in a lot of the details for themselves. Which is probably the only effective way to tell a final parting. It worked well here.
Reviewed by: Imhiriel ✧ Score: 3
Haunting. Arwen's grief communicates itself to the reader very well. Her immediate thoughts interspersed into the slightly more neutral narrative increase the overall effectiveness (however, the sometimes blurred PoVs reduce the clarity/distinctness of certain lines).
Reviewed by: Robinka ✧ Score: 3
A beautiful, sad and touching poem that expresses Arwen's thoughts and feelings after the death of Aragorn, as she finally must face the burden of being mortal. Very evocative, packed with emotions and nicely done!
Reviewed by: Dreamflower ✧ Score: 2
A very nice poem on the death of Aragorn. Very nicely done--reminds me of a medieval ballad.