Shall the Marring Be Amended?

Author: openmeadow

Nominator: mirach

2011 Award Category: Poetry: Character Study - Third Place

Story Type: Poetry  ✧  Length: N/A (Non-Fiction or Poetry)

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: Has it all gone too far? Is Arda Marred forever? Or, is there hope in the Second Song of Eru's making? Also translated to Quenya:

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Reviewed by: Fiondil  ✧  Score: 5

This is a powerfully written plea from the One to His Children, reminding me somewhat of the Hebrew God pleading to the people of Israel to remember Him and have faith in Him. The theme of estel, of hope, is one that is both ancient and new, for so often we despair and our hope fails. Openmeadow gives us a glimpse of that hope from the Author of Hope, of Estel. It is as relevant to our own times as it is to the world of Middle-earth and I think I will keep a copy of it for myself to remind myself that Hope is what sustains the universe and to have faith in the One who sustains it to its ultimate glory.

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 4

I liked this poem very much. The author poses the piece as a series of questioning laments, which works very well for the situation. The rhythm and word choice were spot-on, creating a very good mental image, and calling upon personal knowledge. The style of language works well for piece's premise, and evokes a strong emotional response that rings true. Written with lovely style and perfect tone and voice, I was very impressed by opeanmeadow's efforts. A very good poem.

Reviewed by: Ragnelle  ✧  Score: 4

I liked this poem. It is unrhymed, but the reoccurring questions give it shape and a rhythm even when the rhythm of the words themselves work against it. It is in particular the repetition of the question-words 'where', 'what', 'why', 'who' that helps shape it, and the questions also makes it into something of a lament. There is something unresolved hanging in the air at the end, challenging us to act, which is also fitting for the theme. Well done.

Reviewed by: Larner  ✧  Score: 3

An interesting, poignant poem examining the apparent will of those Elves who remained in Middle Earth to turn from the Powers and the One over them all. Fascinating and thought-provoking.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower  ✧  Score: 3

["Shall the Marring Be Amended?"] is a question that needs answering, not only within the fictional context of Arda Marred, but within the context of the world we face today, where it is all too easy to see both the marring and the straying of the Children.

Reviewed by: Darkover  ✧  Score: 2

This is a delightful poem, humbling in its orientation and scope. Majestically written, and a pleasure to read.