Author: jan-u-wine

Nominator: Antane

2011 Award Category: Poetry: General - Second Place

Story Type: Poetry  ✧  Length: N/A (Non-Fiction or Poetry)

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: Nothing is ever exactly what it seems in the Baggins' smial, not even the simple writing of a *simple* name........

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Reviewed by: Mechtild  ✧  Score: 10

So beautiful it makes me curl my toes as I read it, this poem shows what many readers love about the Ring-bearer, and about Tolkien. Only admirable craft could create this effect for readers. This author has done that. The character of Frodo, his essence and his appeal, is expressed in the little things, things observed in the immediate present. Yet little things point to what is large, and present moments open out to past and future, resonating, like circlets that emanate from where a stone is dropped into a deep pool. The circlets suggest that which is beyond the stone that dropped, like the reverberations one small life will have beyond its seeming limits. Which is what Tolkien does so well in all his art: beckoning readers into a rich but not over-described world, where they will see more than they sought, and beyond what they sought, or even imagined, yet what their heart desires. In this poem, without fanfare or pomp, carefully observed images, sounds, smells, things to touch, are detailed -- not too many, not too few, just the right amount -- to conjure up the scene and Frodo's internal life as he observes it. What a spare wealth of perfect detail describes the Elvish lesson that is the matter of the scene, the characters involved, and the effect on the one who observes it all, the young Ring-bearer, a Ring-bearer worthy of his future commission.

Author response: Dear Linda....the only thing more beautiful than the best of my poems are your intros to them, and this certainly serves the purpose of that, as well as being a review. You, with your words, open up the poem, exposing parts of it that not even I really thought about (of course, I dont' think about them on the levels you describe, so I suppose that it is sort of a matter of luck, or unconscious crafting, that the elements you speak of are there and finely balanced). But you have it, exactly, what I seek to do. Not only that, but you have proclaimed me, in your review, the Mozart of the Tolkien unvierse ('not too many, not too few, just the right amount'). And you know how i love Wolfie. In fact, I am Team Wolfie. I hope that one off-shoot of this awards season is that more people will visit your LJ, for it is a beautiful place you have made there, for all of us. Thank you.

Reviewed by: Antane  ✧  Score: 5

Two poems for the price of one! I enjoyed the first the most, a sweet and sad celebration of the love that will continue to blossom for decades as one hobbit lad comforts another in the loss of his mother, something the other already had experienced so knew how to give the most comfort he could. I liked the ending the most of the second one, the care given to date the big moment of Sam learning to write his name and the beautiful magic that Sam and Bilbo feel and hear when Frodo read in Elvish. What a treat for them both and for us to imagine hearing that lovely one recite.

Author response: dear Antane, I must apologize again for not being able to include both those two-for-one poems. I am ever grateful that you have enjoyed my work, and (I must say) that it was certainly my pleasure and delight to write "Mellon", an early tribute to a never-ending friendship of two jewels amongst hobbits!

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 4

As always, this author's poetry is simply stunning. I loved the rhythm of this particular piece, beating and pulsing--very effective, when all is said and done. Furthermore, jan-u-wine's imagery is perfect here. Very evocative and thought-inspiring. One thing I really enjoyed about this was the use and repetition of colors. Their constant presence throughout the piece created a feel of stability and continuity, providing a great backdrop for the tale.

Author response: Dear Adonnen (we are on a first-name basis now, I hope!)....once again, I am humbled and thankful for your generosity. Thank you for the lovely and very thoughtful review!

Reviewed by: Kara's Aunty  ✧  Score: 3

Full of evocative imagery, this colourful little poem has a touch of lingering melancholy throughout, despite the fact that it portrays a happy event in the life of one young hobbit - though that could just be because I know what the future has in store for this particular trio. Sad, sweet and well-written.

Author response: Dear Kara's Aunty - thank you very much. Words are such wonderful things, aren't they? I'm not exactly sure myself how that sense of melancholy was achieved, whether it is from the reader knowing what is to come, or just by the right mix of words (or both), but it does seem to me that *that* is who Frodo was....a person who, even if in the midst of happiness, was shadowed. I am glad that you enjoyed the poem and thank you again.