Rumour and dreams

Author: cairistiona

Nominator: Inzilbeth

2011 Award Category: Drabble: Men

Story Type: Drabble  ✧  Length: True Drabble

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: A conversation between two men of Bree after the Wraiths hit Sarn Ford. Suddenly the world isn’t quite as they had always thought it to be.(100 words; part of a collection of loosely related ficlets and drabbles.)

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Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 5

Dear Cairstiona, I liked how you have caught the tone of common people here and their way of discussing an incident that changes the way they perceive things. It’s always a credit to people if they can begin to think differently about things and leave behind the ideas they have entertained for many years. I believe this doesn’t happen all that often, and yet you have convincingly shown it here as something that may very well happen - after all, the shock of encountering the Ring Wraiths would shake up their world view in many ways. This is a clever drabble which I read with interest.

Author response: Thank you, Virtuella! You've very succinctly summed up exactly what I wanted this drabble to do. Very much appreciate the review!

Reviewed by: Darkover  ✧  Score: 4

A well-written drabble that is sad and surprisingly uplifting at the same time. It is written from the perspective of two ordinary men of Bree, who by the sacrifice of the Rangers at Sarn Ford, come to understand and appreciate the Dunadain just a little bit better. And the "dream" of hope at the end is one that Aragorn presumably would understand. This was a pleasure to read, and very well written, proving that a talented writer can produce a very moving story in just one hundred words.

Author response: Thank you, Darkover, you're very kind! I'm so glad you found this uplifting... reading a discussion of that tragedy could easily leave only sorrow. But I tried to do those Rangers honor by showing that even in death (for some of them, no doubt), they could illuminate the minds of previously heedless folk.

Reviewed by: Rivergift  ✧  Score: 4

I thought this was pretty amazing. There's something so raw and a little rough about the whole feel of it, but it fits and makes it even more satisfying. It also shows the men of Bree as more than the bumbling, loud, crude fools that many people picture them as, as people who think, feel, and are ready to admit it when they realise they were wrong, men who can dream of a new, better age even if they have never seen the true darkness of evil.

Author response: Thanks, Rivergift! I'm glad you liked this, and glad too that you point out the "raw" feeling of this, which actually was a bit intentional, to bring out the rough-hewn aspect of the Bree-folk. These were no polished, high-born nobles, but neither were they, as you say, bumbling or unkind fools. Even those who aren't learned can have deep thoughts, after all. Thanks again!

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 3

Beautiful. The simplicity of the exchange only serves to highlight what is being said. And the evolution of the conversation is wonderful. A nice look at a certain wake up call for these two men.

Author response: Thank you! I imagine the people of Bree really were rather set aback when they heard about the real identity of Rangers, and what all they did for them so quietly and thanklessly through the years. Hopefully these two raised a glass in their honor at some point. :)

Reviewed by: Linda Hoyland  ✧  Score: 3

This drabble felt like a slice of real life.If Middle-earth had buses this might be a conversation you overheard on one.The drabble is very poignant as the Bree folk realise when it seems too late a little of what the Rangers have done for them and who they are.

Author response: Thank you, Linda! This does sort of sound like a snippet of conversation you might overhear on a bus or train, doesn't it. I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewed by: Inzilbeth  ✧  Score: 3

Ah Tom Bombadil and his big mouth! You have to wonder though if any of the Men of Bree ever wondered about the possibility of survivors from the old kingdom. Cairistiona captures the sense of hopelessness which must have been felt by those who had no idea that 'Hope' had lain hidden for so long. Beautifully done.

Author response: Thanks, Liz! Hee, I suppose Tom B. did have a bit of a big mouth, but I love the idea of Bree-landers wondering about survivors. I imagine not many did, though I think Bowen Rushlight might be an exception. *g*

Reviewed by: Ellynn  ✧  Score: 3

Lovely drabble about two men from Bree discussing rangers, and suddenly realizing the rangers are actually protecting them; it is a perfectly captured moment, with an even better end.

Author response: Thanks, Ellynn! The Bree-landers really did have their eyes opened, didn't they.