Love Token

Author: curiouswombat

Nominator: Ellynn

2011 Award Category: Drabble Series: General

Story Type: Drabble  ✧  Length: Drabble Series

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: A set of six true drabbles looking at the life of a couple of the Elves who joined Legolas in Ithilien.(6x100 written for the 'Hairdressing' challenges at Tolkien Weekly.)

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Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 9

Dear curiouswombat, this is a truly beautiful series. I enjoyed the gentle and meditative tone. There is something very sensuous and very tender in the grooming of another person’s hair and the making of a comb can indeed be a wonderful token of love – one that one may well weep over when lost. I like how all the little scenes give us a sense of a greater whole which we can vaguely imagine. Each vignette has its particular focus and yet contributes to the whole without overshadowing any of the others. Your choice of the opening scene is interesting; it could have easily come last, and yet, standing as it does at the beginning of the series, it gives us a wonderful sense of the past slowly unfolding in front of our eyes – as if the girl was looking into a magic mirror, though in this case it is a magic comb of sorts. I was a little disappointed that there was not a scene of a parent grooming a child, but other than that this ficlet series is completely delightful, insightfully thought out and beautifully executed, and the closing sentence has a rare tenderness of the shiver-down-my-spine quality.

Author response: I am so pleased that you liked these - I enjoyed writing them a good deal. I think you are right about the child - none of the prompts really brought me there, but it would have completed the set well. I'm really pleased that you liked the starting point - it was the first I wrote, and I did think about moving it to the end - but liked the actual last line better myself - as you clearly did too!

Reviewed by: ziggy  ✧  Score: 4

This just takes the reader through a series of drabbles connected by the comb and I like the way the writer has embued such an itme of domesticity with such meaning. That is very feminine writing and the item of the comb is perfect for this, emphasising the sensuality of her husband/lover combing her hair, then the pregnancy and finally leaving. Yes, the horse was a bit confusing but second reading made sense and was really quite poignant. A perfect example of linked drabbles telling a much more complex story than it seems.

Author response: I'm so glad that you enjoyed this drabble set - and I am sorry that you, like another reviewer, were a bit thrown by Rumil and his horse! It's just that I couldn't see him leaving Tindómë behind - for it is them, f course, even though their names aren't mentioned.

Reviewed by: Ellynn  ✧  Score: 3

Really beautiful drabble-series; something ordinary like comb and combing really represent a sign of love in this story. Although it is hard to choose, I'd say that my favorites are the first and the last drabble.

Author response: I'm so glad you like them - I don't often mix my Tindómë and Rumil stories with my drabbles - but they just sneaked in to this set.

Reviewed by: Kaylee Arafinwiel  ✧  Score: 2

Sweet and just beautiful! I admit to being slightly confused with the horse, but I got it on second read. =)

Author response: Thank you. Hmm - he wouldn't really have left his wife behind... well probably not! To be honest I was aiming at that slight uncertainty by leaving the 'disclosure' to that last line in that one :~)

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 2

I liked the way the course of this drabble-series is marked by the lifetime of a comb. It's a simple yet elegant device, and it serves to keep the separate scenes part of one whole.

Author response: Thank you - I enjoyed this series of prompts a good deal - and am pleased that you like the outcome of the prompts.