A Dawn in Winter
2011 Award Category: Fixed-Length Ficlets: Immortals
Story Type: Story ✧ Length: Ficlet
Rating: General ✧ Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: A double-drabble inspired by heavy snowfall one December day in southern England. Dark places can be made very light by a fall of snow, and one Wood-Elf intends to enjoy it.(Double-drabble (200 words))
Reviewed by: Dwimordene ✧ Score: 4
I love this little ficlet for its ability to capture that first significant snow of the year. The silence, the quality of light as it plays off the snow, and the feel of snow under one's feet - Azalais describes it all beautifully. Mirkwood in its winter coat comes alive, and shows a different side of itself, and also of one of its princes. I can imagine why Legolas loves this seasonal change and was so eager to be out in the forest, despite the cold. Lovely, Az!
Author response: Thank you! I was trying hard to capture the atmosphere, so I'm delighted I succeeded for you. It was nice to make Mirkwood light and sparkly for once!
Reviewed by: Jay of Lasgalen ✧ Score: 3
This is lovely, and I like how even the darkness of Mirkwood can be lightened by the beauty of snow. I love Legolas's excitement and his encounter with the doe - I feel the same thrill when I see one of our rare snowfalls!
Author response: Thank you! It was, indeed, "one of our rare snowfalls" last winter that inspired this - and the doe had really happened to me in woods near us a few years before; so I thought I'd lend her to Legolas. I'm glad you liked it.
Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon ✧ Score: 3
A very pretty drabble that paints a lovely word-picture of Mirkwood covered in snow and ice. The image of Legolas and the doe gazing at each other, passengers in the white world of wintry Mirkwood, is lovely.
Author response: Thank you! It was a snap response to that kind of weather suddenly arriving in sudden England last winter, and the doe had really happened to me on a winter walk a few years earlier, so I thought I'd share her and the snow with Legolas; I'm glad you found it evocative.
Reviewed by: Darkover ✧ Score: 3
This drabble is a bit light on plot, but the strength of it lies in description; this tale is beautifully written. The reader can just see Legolas walking on the surface of the snow and hear the delicate crunch as just the very top breaks beneath his boots. Enjoyable to read. Well done.
Author response: I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was a spur-of-the-moment response to unexpected sudden heavy snow in our particular corner of the world, so it's good that it's evocative for you.
Reviewed by: Russandol ✧ Score: 3
I like the sense of light and serenity of this double drabble and the quiet encounter with the doe. Best of all, I enjoyed Legolas child-like joy as he leaves his home; it reminds me of my own glee whenever I wake up to a glittering snowed landscape. Lovely scene.
Author response: Thank you! It was a heavy snowfall in our part of the world that inspired the piece, so I'm very pleased the scene came across to you.
Reviewed by: curiouswombat ✧ Score: 3
A lovely ficlet, and very suitable for mid-winter, this. I like the sense of peace, purity, and joy that the snow brings to Legolas and all of his father's realm, albeit briefly, in their dark times.
Author response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. We had heavy snow last December when I wrote it and I wanted to try to capture the atmosphere for Legolas to enjoy...
Reviewed by: ziggy ✧ Score: 3
A very well crafted evocation of the snow on a winter morning- this just catches the excitement of going out into a crisp clear day with snow and just looking. Its the exchange of grin with the guards that does it.
Author response: Thank you! I'm glad I succeeded in evoking the atmosphere for you - we had fairly rare heavy snow in my part of the world at the time. And the grin felt just right :-)
Reviewed by: Linda Hoyland ✧ Score: 3
Snow is pretty to look at but few share Legolas ability to move gracefully on it. A wonderfully descriptive piece that vividly shows the beauty of a snowy rural landscape and Legolas' delight in it. For a few moments I forgot how much I dislike snow!
Author response: Thank you, Linda. Given that you don't like snow and I know you can take or leave Legolas, I'm especially pleased you enjoyed it and that you took the trouble to review!
Reviewed by: agape4gondor ✧ Score: 3
What a beautiful moment. I love finding little bits and pieces of favorite carachters' lives. This waz one of them. Though I did have to laugh at the elf's progress over the snow. I wrote one such moment, but in a different place and time. Nicely written.
Author response: Thank you for the review! "Little bits and pieces of favourite characters' lives" are one of the best reasons to write fic, I think, so I'm pleased you liked this.
Reviewed by: Altariel ✧ Score: 2
Brought the feel of last winter back to me. Lovely description and the doe is a quiet thrill. So hard to capture a perfect moment: this is beautifully done.
Author response: Thank you! The doe really happened to us in the woods a mile away from here one December 27th, so I thought I'd lend her to Legolas.
Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel ✧ Score: 2
A Dawn in Winter is a lovely look at a peaceful morning. Azalais's description was eloquent and detailed, and gave the scene a wonderful setting.
Author response: Thank you! I'm glad the description was effective and that you enjoyed the piece.
Reviewed by: Ellynn ✧ Score: 2
This is a wonderful description of Mirkwood all covered in snow. I can see all the pictures Azalais created with her sentences, and the very last sentence is especially beautiful.
Author response: Thank you! I'm delighted it was so vivid for you.