Our Days are Ending and Our Years Failing
2011 Award Category: Drabble: Post-Ring War
Story Type: Drabble ✧ Length: True Drabble
Rating: Teen ✧ Reason for Rating: Disturbing Imagery/Themes
Summary: Legolas' thoughts are melancholy after Merry's death. For the LiveJournal tolkien_weekly "Tangled Web: Knit" challenge.(100 words.)
Reviewed by: Starlight ✧ Score: 6
A very poignant moment, and a wonderfully insightful exploration of what it really means for the Elves to be tied to the circles, as opposed to partakers of the gift of IlÃºvatar: what does this mean? Is it really a gift? As I age, and particularly since having children, I think about these things more often than I used to when I was younger. It must be awful to be the last to go! And, at the same time, a selfish thought. I loved how Legolas sees things, and the thought that sustains him. Another thing I love is how you show how central it became to each of them that they had Once belonged to this Felliwship. I find this idea appealing in so many different levels, and you show it marvelously in this piece. Well done!
Author response: Thank you for such a thoughtful review! I always find it very hard to let go of the Fellowship at the end of LoTR, so I too love the idea that even if they could never all meet again, their individual bonds of friendship sustained them lifelong.
Reviewed by: Dreamflower ✧ Score: 4
Such a sad drabble. It's hard to think of one of the hobbits passing. I've often thought of how difficult it must have been for Legolas to see his friends of the Fellowship gone, one after the other, to where he could not follow. And even his sustaining thought is bittersweet, for even if Gimli comes with him across the Sea, he will still have to part with him. I think Legolas was both brave and strong, risking his heart on friendship with mortals.
Author response: I totally agree with you about Legolas! I'm glad it came across as bittersweet - that's exactly what I was aiming for...
Reviewed by: cairistiona ✧ Score: 4
Oh goodness, this brought tears to my eyes. Generally, I try to avoid reading any stories about the deaths of the members of the Fellowship, because, yes, I'm a great coward, but when I find one that's as moving as this, I'm always glad for having banished my reticence. This was so poignant. I want so badly to give Legolas a huge hug, and thankfully, yes, Gimli is coming and hopefully will do just that!
Author response: I'll join you in hugging Legolas any time ;-) I always feel it must have been so hard for him as "last one standing" to watch all his friends pass away, one by one - and I'm so glad Gimli went to Valinor with him.
Reviewed by: Tanaqui ✧ Score: 4
This drabble is beautifully constructed, with the metaphor of the challenge prompt well worked into the themes of friendship and its ending through death. The language of Legolas's thoughts is both lyrical and controlled, conveying both his general character and his mood at this particular time. Very nicely done and a lovely example of how much can be conveyed in one hundred words by a skilled drabblist.
Reviewed by: Elleth ✧ Score: 3
Melancholy, but lovely all the same. I enjoyed the fact that although Legolas was grieving, he has developed enough faith into mortals (and especially, dwarves - their friendship was one of my favourite notions in the books) to hope for reprieve by Gimli's arrival in spite of the circumstances.
Author response: Oops, I seem to have missed replying to this one! Thank you, Elleth - I do always feel melancholy about the many endings in LoTR, and the ongoing friendship of Legolas and Gimli always cheers me up too...
Reviewed by: Altariel ✧ Score: 3
Yes, very hard ["to think of that small bier"]. A melancholy reflection on the passing of friends and fellowship. You are excellent as ever on the almost-bewilderment of the immortal at the mortality of those around him.
Author response: I do get very melancholy contemplating all the many endings of the Fellowship, including this one. I'm glad you feel this works.
Reviewed by: Darkover ✧ Score: 3
The difficulty of being a near-immortal Elf is that you can end up being the last one standing. This drabble accurately portrays Legolas' thoughts and emotions in that regard. The thought that the Fellowship one day will be no more saddens him, but the thought of his friendship with Gimli sustains him. A sensitive idea, well written.
Author response: Thank you for the review, Darkover - I'm glad Legolas' feelings at that moment ring true for you and that I managed to put them across.
Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel ✧ Score: 3
A bittersweet drabble, highlighting the differences between mortal and immortal (beyond the most obvious, naturally). Legolas's thoughts seem spot-on with what we know of him, and they fit in very well with both the occasion and his present company.
Author response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad you felt Legolas was in-character.