Elros' Gift

Author: agape4gondor

Nominator: Linaewen

2011 Award Category: Elves: Elronds Household - Second Place

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Ficlet

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: Elrond looks with wonder upon his brother's legacy - Minas Tirith. A double drabble per MS Word.(This is a double drabble - 200 words per MS Word.)

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Reviewed by: Linaewen  ✧  Score: 10

I have always loved stories about these two brothers, Elrond and Elros, and have often wished there were more of them, particularly stories that delve into the choices they each made that changed each of their destinies. For this reason, I especially love this story! Agape4gondor is a master when it comes to describing in just a few words the emotion of the moment, as well as giving a very good feel for the setting that is as much a part of the moment as the strong sentiments of the character in question. In this case, we have Elrond finding the unexpected presence of his brother in the architecture of Minas Tirith. From his vantage point on the slopes above the City, he has a very good view of everything. Agape4gondor has obviously done her research when it comes to architecture, and uses that study well to draw a vivid picture of the White City, as clear to our eyes as it is to Elrond. I love how the story goes from Elrond's sorrow at the unexpected meeting with his brother through his influence on Numenorean architecture, to his laughter over the presence of obelisks. Through this we learn a wee bit about Elros, that he loved marble and was particularly fond of columns. Somehow it seems a fitting preference for the one who was the first King of Men; it is also fitting that the arhitectural forms he preferred should remain as a tribute to his memory. The author's note makes me laugh, too. What fun to have a Muse that gives a writer such a clear picture of things, and even informs the writer about the time of day and the occasion -- even when it doesn't end up being mentioned in the story. Sometimes the unmentioned tidbits that muses provide in the course of writing a tale are the best kind of foundation for a story that fascinates with its fine detail and vivid description. This is one such tale, and I highly recommend it!

Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 6

Dear Agape4Gondor, what a truly original idea this is! Of course it is trivial to declare that stone outlasts human bodies, but to turn this as you did here, to have Elrond recognise his brother’s tastes and preferences, his very spirit in the architecture of Minas Tirith is a very clever concept indeed. The scene is very vivid and I can see it all right before me, those marble columns and obelisks. The laughter and tears mix very convincingly, the sense of love and loss is acute and yet the whole piece is overall uplifting. It makes me want to visit or revisit famous buildings to ponder some more about the minds of those who designed them. They left us gifts indeed. Thank you, I really enjoyed reading this ficlet.

Author response: *blushes* Thank you.

Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon  ✧  Score: 5

I love the idea of this story; and Agape carries it out well into words. The concept that Elros recognizes his brother's influence in the architecture of Minas Tirith works well here, since the White City was built by Numenoreans with what could have been remnants of Numenorean technology; and Numenor of course was the kingdom founded and ruled by Elros. And we know that Numenoreans built on a grand scale; so the columns and obelisks would be a hallmark of the Men of the West, the Men who had inherited Elros' legacy. Interesting and touching ficlet.

Author response: Bless you and thank you.

Reviewed by: Azalais  ✧  Score: 5

I'm so fond of Elrond, and the extraordinary circumstances of his life hold so much sorrow. This is a really original thought - to encounter your centuries-dead brother through the forms and lines of the city he designed. I love the fact that it brings out yet again the incredible depth of historical time in Middle-earth, both looking back to Cirdan's founding of the Havens and, implicitly, forward to Minas Tirith as we see it in the Third Age. But above all I'm pleased that Elrond's grief can sit alongside laughter and joy in the remembrance of Elros.

Author response: I am so hoping to one day do a sequel to this. It was such a relief to write. For Elrond's sake. Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewed by: Larner  ✧  Score: 4

In this brief ficlet one can truly appreciate Agape’s great love for Gondor, and particularly for the White City of Minas Tirith itself. Elrond looks down upon the city for the first time, and recognizes in it the strength of his brother’s influence even with all the intervening years since the two were sundered by the Sea and death. I love the variety of emotions Elrond experiences. Well done!

Author response: Thank you. It had been a long time since Elros touched Elrond.

Reviewed by: goldleaves  ✧  Score: 3

I enjoyed the emotion that Elrond is depicted showing. It is rare for Elrond to show emotion or to find a fic about him thinking of his brother, and it shows that Elrond is not as emotionless as commonly thought. It shows a different and more open side to Elrond. This fic is brilliant in its simplicity.

Author response: Bless you. Gosh, brilliant? What a neat thing to say. Thank you. As for Elrond's emotions. He was alone and the 'scent' of his beloved twin lay before him. How could he not weep? And laugh?

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 3

What a unique piece! I loved this, as, like Elrond himself, I never would have thought to find his brother's personality in the architecture of Minas Tirith. What a wonderful legacy to have left behind!

Reviewed by: Fiondil  ✧  Score: 3

A lovely piece where we see Elrond finding his brother in a most unusual manner. I think it very likely that Elros would leave his mark this way. It’s nice to see Elrond laughing uproariously. Good job, Apage.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower  ✧  Score: 2

An appealing notion, that Elrond could recognize his brother's influence and handiwork in the architecture of his descendents.