A Veiled Light
2004 Award Category: Times: The Silmarillion: Incomplete - First Place
Story Type: Incomplete ✧ Length: unknown
Rating: R ✧ Reason for Rating: some sex scenes
Summary: A Maia is sent to Middle-earth in the Second Age and must learn to deal with the shortcomings of a mortal body.
Review scores are not available for 2004.
Reviewed by: Viv ✧ Score: N/A
Argh! You've removed all but the first three chapters! I knew you were rewriting, but, but, but... Cirdan! Gil-Galad! Elrond! All of the aforementioned hot elves nekkid and bothered! I feel very much like pouting, but I'll restrain myself. Yes, yes, the three chapters you've left up are spectacular as far as introductions go. Your desriptions of the limitations and encumberances a Maia would feel in a human body were particularly believable. Of course she would come up on deck without clothes, imagining her mortal form to be clothing enough. Makes sense to me. How rude of those elves to stare. And the dream sequence seemed a little more detailed than it was before, now with a mention of the chest of goodies (was that in there before, this early on? I don't remember it, but I did start reading this story a long time ago). I hope you'll get the muse to begin your rewriting in earnest: there's so much genius sitting privately on your hard drive right now, and it deserves a really bright spotlight.
Reviewed by: Christine ✧ Score: N/A
I don't know where to start. I first had to choose which version I wanted to review and then stick with that. But I could not. At first though, I have to say that either version is unique, well written, painstakingly thought-out by the author and absolutely incredible. What else is there to say? Well aside from the fact that the new edition is going to take the reader to the main plot more rapidly then in the original, the reader is treated with an amazing array of characters, plot devices, scenery and emotions. Either version is intriguing and captures the reader's attention. I like the romance and tension between Ilmare and her male friends in the first version and I love the sharp and much more defined plot the author is writing in the second version. This fiction is a definite must read for those who want to be treated to fantastic writing and a wonderful plot.
Reviewed by: Marta ✧ Score: N/A
This is one of the few Works-in-Progress that I read, and I'm not sorry. The plot (at least in the chapters that were still online when I went to reread) is slow and meandering, and I feel like I'm discovering the joys of a body with Ilmarë for the first time. But not too slow. It's never dull. Just... exploratory, I guess.I also had to laugh at the explanation of Cirdan's beard, and Ilmarë's full bladder. Well done, and I look forward to more.
Reviewed by: Jilian ✧ Score: N/A
What can I say? Having been `in' so to speak on much of the agony this author has been through with this story, and seen it evolve into a saga of sweeping granduor to rival Tolkien himself I can't speak too highly. From poor Ilmare, battling the shortcomings and strangness of her mortal body, to the beautiful word portraits of Cirdan, Elrond and Gil-Galad as descended from Finarfine, this story has everything, including the author's wicked sense of humour!