Too Many Adverbs
2007 Award Category: Genres: Humor: Drabble - Honorable Mention
Story Type: Fixed-Length Ficlet ✧ Length: True Drabble
Rating: General ✧ Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: A war of words between young Boromir and his tutor.(100 words, written for the "Awkwardly" challenge at Tolkien_weekly)
Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon ✧ Score: 5
Boromir the Bold and hardy and forward in battle would certainly have been a handful as a boy; and perhaps most of all to the loremaster assigned the task of teaching him. In this amusing drabble by Branwyn, the loremaster tries to persuade his young charge of the importance of mastering adverbs. Boromir is written exceptionally well here; as a youngster who is not fond of book learning and grammar, yet is clever enough to wear out his tutor in a verbal fencing match. We also see the persistence and determination that are so much part of Boromir's character in later life. I can almost see the patience of the poor loremaster, who seems to be a good teacher, fading.
Reviewed by: EdorasLass ✧ Score: 5
Oh, the frustrating task of trying to teach Boromir proper verb construction! I feel for this poor loremaster, being charged with teaching Boromir grammar when I'm sure it is clear to everyone (including his parents), that Boromir has absolutely no patience for such dull tasks - why do I feel as if the loremaster probably lost some sort of bet, in being given this job? And I love how Boromir is *certain* someone else will write anything he needs written, and how he perks right up at the notion of being surrounded by orcs! Sounds fairly typical young boy to me, and equally as typically Boromir.
Reviewed by: stefaniab ✧ Score: 3
Branwyn, I think this story is directed at me, who cringes at J.K. Rowling's bizarre (to me) use of adverbs. As a technical writer who sometimes uses adverbs incorrectly (just ask my editors), I double (or doubly) appreciated this little drabble.
Reviewed by: Marta ✧ Score: 3
*snerk* Every student (or teacher) knows the frustrations of grammar, and I'm sure young Boromir would have been a special terror to his tutor. Branwyn does a good job of capturing his situation.
Reviewed by: Nancy Brooke ✧ Score: 3
Very cute! This shows us nothing new about the Steward's Heir but his teachers is a wonderful character, struggling to find a way to reach his student without being led too far afield.
Reviewed by: Tanaqui ✧ Score: 3
An amusing portrait of Boromir trying the patience of his tutor. The disdain of a young warrior for the finer arts is vividly drawn as is what brings him back to his lesson. The tutor is also clearly sketched in a few words, with his dry humour crating a perfect last line. Nicely done!
Reviewed by: Elena Tiriel ✧ Score: 3
(Possible spoilers within:) Okay, I reluctantly admit it -- I burst out laughing hysterically when I read this initially.... and then wildly giggled afterward. Most especially well done!
Reviewed by: Larner ✧ Score: 2
A frustrated tutor tries to deal with a recalictrant student who doesn't wish to study grammar. So, the orcs may be armed with parts of speech? Heh!
Reviewed by: Lindelea ✧ Score: 2
*snork* I empathize. Not only are there too many adverbs, but they keep jumping into my stories without my noticing their burgeoning numbers.
Reviewed by: Linda hoyland ✧ Score: 2
This drabble conveys an amusing insight into Boromir's impatience at anything save fighting.I imagine a similiar piece about his brother would be quite different!