Nominator: Raksha the Demon
2007 Award Category: Genres: Drama: Gondor Drabble - Honorable Mention
Story Type: Fixed-Length Ficlet ✧ Length: True Drabble
Rating: General ✧ Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: After the death of his brother, Faramir considers how the loss of one part alters the whole.(100 words, written for the "Angle" challenge at Tolkien_weekly, complete)
Reviewed by: Tanaqui ✧ Score: 7
I am no longer surprised by how Branwyn can continually surprise me by coming up with perspectives on topics which are both fresh and unexpected and yet, once they have been pointed out, undeniably "right". This drabble is a fine example of the way she combines those wonderful insights with her undoubted talent for wordsmithery. The neatness of concept and neatness of its expression not only compliment each other but are entirely fitting given the subject of the piece. The geometric metaphor in this beautifully shaped drabble perfectly captures the relationships between Denethor and his sons, both before and after Boromir's departure for Rivendell. The idea is then wrapped in direct, strong language where not a word is wasted or misplaced, adding to the power of the drabble. This is one of those drabbles I keep reading and re-reading with an increasing sense of envy that I didn't write it and a growing desire to create something as affecting and effective. Bravo indeed!
Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon ✧ Score: 6
This piece is a stark drabble that uses geometry as Faramir's metaphor to summarize the relationships between himself and his father and brother, and the effect on that [lopsided triangle] when one side is removed. The days of Boromir's absence must have been increasingly hard on the father whose favorite son he was; and the brother who loved him. This drabble presents, with a minimum of well-chosen words, the sorrowful spectacle of a broken family, in geometrical shapes, and the naked truth of [diverging angles]. The excellent characterisation of Faramir and Denethor seems effortless. Faramir's thoughts are particularly well-written, and, well...Faramirish. Denethor's reaction to Boromir's loss seems right on target. Excellent use of the challenge prompt!
Reviewed by: Imhiriel ✧ Score: 6
A fascinating take on the prompt! The symbolism is certainly very appropriate, and I appreciate it very much that there is more than one level of this thread as you have transferred the metaphors also to a "concrete", "real" meaning in the drabble when Faramir thinks about his geometry lessons and is himself comparing the family situation to a triangle. I can see Boromir as the one holding Faramir and their father together: being the favourite of Denethor, but also being a good brother to Faramir (which can't have been easy). With his loss the two remaining sides will diverge all the faster... I also like how the beginning sets the mood throughout the rest of the drabble: the emphasis on silence and emptiness positively echoes through the subsequent lines.
Reviewed by: agape4gondor ✧ Score: 5
Death absolutely sucks and you have definitely portrayed how a family could react to such an event. As much as it pains me, I can see the imagery of the triangle. And especially the fact that the family still, while the triangle was intact, considered themselves 'whole.' I think many families are made into such an object. I know when my brother was turned into a vegetable after a serious car accident, the whole family died. Incredibly sad, but very well written and catches what must have been the most pain-filled moment of both their lives. *sobs*
Reviewed by: EdorasLass ✧ Score: 5
This is one of the most concise, true fics of the days immediately after learning of Boromir's death that I've ever read. I like this particularly - [He had pictured his family as a lopsided triangle, with Boromir having the longest side ] - it's not only a lovely bit of imagery, but seems very Faramir in its conception, not just that Boromir has the longest side, but by virture of the mathematical-ness of it. For all that he has a very dreamy side, it has always seemed to me that Faramir would appreciate the precision of mathematics. And it's a strangely affecting image as well, a broken triangle, for reasons I'm not sure I can even articulate. Very well done.
Reviewed by: Dwimordene ✧ Score: 3
A brief, poignant representation of Denethor and Faramir, after Boromir's death. The childhood image of a clumsy, lopsided triangle, points for people joined together, is undone and one can imagine the gaping division between Faramir and his father quite clearly.
Reviewed by: Larner ✧ Score: 3
A wonderful drabble looking at the loss of Boromir from Faramir's point of view, with himself and his father as now barely connecting line segments without Boromir to tie them together. Excellent evocation of mood.
Reviewed by: Marigold ✧ Score: 3
What a clear way to show the impact the loss of Boromir would have on Faramir and Denethor. Without the strong line of Boromir holding them together the symbolic lines denoting Faramir and Denethor would soon collapse - they could no longer maintain their secure position without him to hold them together. Excellent symbolism.
Reviewed by: Marta ✧ Score: 3
Oh, how sad! You captured Faramir's grief for his brother's passing (and, if I may say so, Denethor's in many ways even better by saying so little). As a mathematician I found the analogy really evocative, and I can see both Faramir and Denethor thinking of things in this terms, too. Very nice gapfiller.
Reviewed by: Lindelea ✧ Score: 2
Very nice use of symbolism and imagery. Well done, especially within the confines of the drabble form.
Reviewed by: White Wolf ✧ Score: 2
I really like the way you had Faramir think of his family in geometric terms. It was a sad situation that was unfortunately accurate. Very original.
Reviewed by: Bodkin ✧ Score: 2
Oh - very apt! Boromir was the link that provided a bond between Denethor and Faramir and, without him, the others will only end up further apart.