Empty Heart

Author: Ellynn

Nominator: cairistiona

2011 Award Category: Ficlet: Later Age Elves - Third Place

Story Type: Story  ✧  Length: Ficlet

Rating: General  ✧  Reason for Rating: N/A

Summary: Love brings joy, but it can also break one's heart. Written for February Teitho theme: Heart Break. Ficlet containing about 850 words.

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Reviewed by: cairistiona  ✧  Score: 5

This one is hard to review without spoiling, but I'll try! Written for Teitho's "Heartbreak" challenge, this lovely little vignette is filled with all the imagery you want to read in a love story, but doesn't sink into the dreaded purple prose that has ruined many an author's attempt at telling a tale of romantic intrigue. Ellynn's ability to weave a vibrant, three-dimensional portrait with her words is in full effect with this ficlet, which starts out making you think you know what it's about, only to deftly show you by the end that bringing preconceived expectations to a tale is never a good idea!

Author response: Thanks so much for your kind words. *hugs*

Reviewed by: Virtuella  ✧  Score: 5

Dear Ellynn, you fooled me alright. As I was reading this, I began to think, “Yeah, yeah, yeah, poor Aragorn feels he will never get Arwen, but we all know he does in the en, and is this really necessary, Ellynn, after all, what new insights does this give?” You sly creature! Yes, it is perfectly feasible that other would have felt the same about Arwen, after all, we are told that it was mostly her looks and her grace that thrilled Aragorn, and other people have eyes to see, too. A neat trick you've pulled off here, Ellyn, a neat trick!

Author response: Yep, I admit, I was a little evil while writing this! :D I knew my readers would make wrong assumptions while reading, and I giggled while imagining all of you when you reached the end. I am glad you like my little trick. :)

Reviewed by: Rivergift  ✧  Score: 5

This is a strange little piece, leading the reader onto a path they think is familiar, and then turning right round and surprising them! Very smart, effective use of words - at the end, I was forced to reread the whole piece just to make sure, and I was amazed at the amount of assumptions I'd been making! Just shows how accustomed I've become to Aragorn pining for Arwen stories, and this one took me in completely. It's quite a sad tale, too, the Daeron in Arwen's life, just as there was in Luthien's. Beauty has its pitfalls. Overall, a very clever story and I loved the twist!

Author response: Thank you for your compliments. Yes, I was a little evil while writing this (knowing my readers will make wrong assumptions). I am glad you like the twist in the end. :)

Reviewed by: Adonnen Estenniel  ✧  Score: 4

In this short piece, the author uses reader-confusion/vagueness as a tactic that, though unexpected, worked very well for the overall impression she was trying to achieve. As I read along I found myself nodding, thinking what an excellent portrayal of Aragorn's thoughts this was, only to find in the end I was completely mistaken. I haven't seen this technique often, but in this case I enjoyed it and thought it served the author's purpose. This was an interesting and unexpected romance.

Author response: Thanks so much for your review. I am so glad you like this. :)

Reviewed by: Erulisse  ✧  Score: 4

I was familiar with Ellynn's other nominated stories, so took this opportunity to read the one I was not familiar with. Ellynn crafted a beautiful framework here that relies upon canon knowledge and assumption to fill in the blanks. But the last portion is the twist, and it's a really good one. So who was she really talking about? Fill in the blank, but don't miss the story. A lovely tale by a talented author.

Author response: Thanks so much for your compliments, dear! And I am very glad you like my little trick in the end. :)

Reviewed by: obsidianj  ✧  Score: 3

To answer you question first. You have surely fooled Aragorn. I have an idea who this stranger is. But aside from that I think this is a very insightful ficlet into Aragorn's thoughts and hopes.

Author response: Well, the "stranger" is Aragorn! And the narrator is an unnamed Lorien elf. I mean, I bet that not just one elf fell in love with Arwen during her long years. So, I was a little evil while writing this and played with my readers. :D All of you made wrong assumptions while reading this, didn't you? :) In the end, this poor elf is broken-hearted when he sees Arwen with Aragorn. Thanks for your review!

Reviewed by: Darkover  ✧  Score: 3

It is not often that a reader finds a story that is written in such excellent, descriptive style, full of emotion and yet progressing smoothly, and that has such a brilliant ending! Beyond that, it is difficult to describe this story--just read it! Very enjoyable and well done.

Author response: Aww, thanks so much for your praise! *hugs*

Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon  ✧  Score: 3

A lovely short story focussing on the love of Arwen. But, in a neat bit of misdirection, it is not Aragorn who, smitten with love for the latter-day Luthien, narrates the piece, but an unnamed Elf. It makes a lot of sense, Arwen probably broke many hearts among both Elves and Men while she waited for one who would melt her own. Romantically yet credibly written.

Author response: Thank you for your kind review, I am glad you like this. :)

Reviewed by: Linda Hoyland  ✧  Score: 3

I loved this clever story which had me fooled right until the final paragraph!It feels very true though as I'm sure Arwen unwittingly broke many hearts until she found her one true love.

Author response: Thanks for the review, dear! Yes, probably many fell in love with her, but their love was unrequited. I actually sympathize with the narrator of this story.

Reviewed by: Himring  ✧  Score: 1

Yes, certainly, you fooled me all right. Very clever!

Author response: He-he, I am glad I did. :D And thanks for the review. :)