Eclipsed by the Moon

Author: EdorasLass

Nominator: Marta

2005 Award Category: Genres: Romance: Vignette - First Place

Story Type: Vignette  ✧  Length: N/A

Rating: PG-13  ✧  Reason for Rating: erotic content, adult themes

Summary: A kitchen maid in the Meduseld watches the object of her affections. It is not who you might think it is.

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Reviewed by: Marta  ✧  Score: 9

First things first -- your Grima reminds me of nothing so much as Professor Snape! I don't know whether you had him as an image when writing this, but the personal characteristics you describe just cry out "Snape" to me! Now that I've said that... Lathwyn is a brilliant protagonist. She is cunning, sharp, but also she has a darker side. The statement to her being scorched by the sun reminded mee of Gollum, which I suppose is fitting in a way, and it does make sense. Theodred and Eorl have a beauty and a glory to them, but it is very intense, and for one who loves subtlety their very beauty would "burn". Beyond that, this very short piece made me think about Grima more deeply. Would he have turned out better if he had settled for Lathwyn? Quite possibly not because I don't think Eowyn was a primary motivation in his actions; as Lathwyn points out, he really does have Gondor's best interests at heart. And on Lathwyn... doesn't her name mean "ill-maiden" or something like that? If my translation is right, I have to complement you on the most thought-provoking and aptly given name for any OC I have ever seen. I know there's a WIP based on this. After reading this snippet, I definitely want to go look it up, when I can find the time.

Reviewed by: annmarwalk  ✧  Score: 6

A cool, dark romance, focusing on an OFC and an unexpected canon character, he who eclipses the golden sons of Rohan as the moon eclipses the sun. EdoraLass’s writing is a subtle and sleek as a cat as, catlike, a kitchen wench at Edoras ponders the object of her affection. The parallels between Grima, cunning and resourceful but treated with contempt, and the kitchen maid, also clever and devious in achieving her ends, are very skillfully drawn. A very unexpected pairing, but one that speaks well, I think, to Real Life – for who can explain the mystery that is sexual attraction? A very unusual and compelling tale by one of our most promising new authors.

Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger  ✧  Score: 6

Why is it girls always fall for the bad boys? The summary clued me in to the object of this maid's affections, but I still enjoyed the process of discovering who it was. I really like the idea of Theodred and Eomer being like the sun while Grima was an eclipsing moon. That's a powerful comparison, and it not only harmonizes with their appearances but it also says something rather profound about their means and methods. Also profound in this story is the way the maid is so fully realized but is never even granted a name. It's a difficult thing to make an unnamed OC a complete character, and even harder if that OC is female and hungering for one of the canon characters. Great work, and great metaphors for the leaders of Rohan.

Reviewed by: nerwen_calaelen  ✧  Score: 3

An interesting scene. It is an intreaging veiw to show and it is interesting to see characters presented in a different light. I like the way that you have constructed this story with the suspence from the start. However, I think that your note in the summary gives tis point away.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene  ✧  Score: 2

Warned by the summary, I did guess the man in question before he was named. Nevertheless, an entertaining change from the more usual "pairs".