Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards

A Foolish Thing

Author: Dana
Nominator: Marigold
2005 Award Category: Books/Time: The Lord of The Rings: Hobbits - Honorable Mention

Story Type: Story : Length: Short Story
Rating: PG -- Reason for Rating: PG for angst
Summary: The palantir...what Merry and Pippin saw...


Reviewed by: Marigold -- Score: 8

Dana has such a wonderful way of weaving words and story threads and this story is one of her best I think. Merry’s contemplation of what Pippin has gone through is woven with the description of Pippin’s first hand experience of being laid bare to Sauron, and the result is a very powerful glimpse of the moments directly after Pippin looked into the palantir. I think that Pippin’s part of this story is my favourite. The descriptions as he struggles tenaciously not to reveal all he knows to the Dark Lord give such insight to his spirit and strength of will. He may have been foolish to look, but there is nothing of the fool about him as he manages to survive this rape of his mind without revealing more to Sauron than what type of creature he is. I feel such pride in him! I feel sad for Merry because he has no control over this situation, and must just accept. There is a heavy sense of hopelessness over the whole situation slowly coming down upon him, as though he has begun to feel the loneliness of missing Pippin even before Gandalf takes him away.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower -- Score: 4

This beautiful vignette was written in response to a challenge to expand on the scene with Pippin and the palantir from Merry's point of view. It is written in the present tense, which lends it a sense of urgency and immediacy, as we are caught up in Merry's stream of consciousness. We see his anger and disappointment in Pippin's action evaporate in the face of his worry. It is a very evocative piece.

Reviewed by: Lindelea -- Score: 3

Skilfully woven, passing between Merry's self-recriminations (excellent use of repetition with the phrase "he should have seen it coming") and Pippin's experience with the Palantir. Dana has a clear grasp of her characters, and leaves the reader with a bittersweet tang after the story's close.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene -- Score: 2

I like the elaboration on Pippin's vision, and also that Merry, too, sees something, if only in hindsight. A lucky thing for Pippin his cousin understands him as well as he does.