Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards

The Dark Places

Author: Citrine
Nominator: Marigold
2005 Award Category: Books/Time: The Lord of The Rings: Hobbits - Third Place

Story Type: Story : Length: Short Story
Rating: G -- Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: The hobbits hold onto each other in the darkness of Moria, and Pippin understands that caring for each other is what will see them through the Quest...


Reviewed by: Marigold -- Score: 7

There are wonderful characterisations of the hobbits here. Everything about their thoughts and interactions was just right. I liked Merry wanting to have some sort of physical hold of Pippin and Pippin giving in for Merry’s peace of mind was exactly what he would do. And Frodo stumbling to divert Sam’s attention shows how well he knows his friend, as Merry’s understanding of what Frodo did shows how well he knows his elder cousin. Discovering the bones was very sad. Pippin’s realisation that the bones could belong to Merry or Frodo or Sam or anyone of them was sobering. I liked the way that the joking banter between Merry and Pippin at the beginning was used again at the end, it was a very hobbity way to get them moving onward. Pippin's realisation at the end that if they just stuck together and relied upon each other that they could make it through was a lovely ending.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene -- Score: 5

This is a nice gap-filler, and Pippin's voice feels very natural. I particularly liked Frodo's faking a stumble to take Sam's mind off his fears and give him a sense of purpose during the long trek through Moria, and Merry's efforts to make light of their situation sounds just right to me. It's a short story, but everyone gets a little moment to speak and contribute a little, in an understated manner, towards the author's goal of showing that it's caring for each other (and even for the dead) that helps the Fellowship through its trials.

Reviewed by: Marta -- Score: 4

Oh, nice job characterising the four hobbits! Especially Pippin. It must have been frustrating: as a tweenager he was just at the age when he wanted to stretch his legs and he's away from family and home, but he's probably under tighter watch than ever in his whole life, especially after the incident at the Prancing Pony. You portrayed his physical terror and his eventual acceptance that trhe fellowship was all interconnected very well.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower -- Score: 2

What a perfect look at what it must have been like in Moria, the light joking hobbity words contrasting starkly with their dark and helpless thoughts! I liked the ending, with its repitition of the beginning; very well balanced.

Reviewed by: Rabidsamfan -- Score: 2

There are some lovely characterizations in this small vignette. I love Pippin making bad jokes and Frodo finding the best way to distract and comfort Sam.