Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards

Eclipsed

Author: Calenlass Greenleaf
Nominator: Nosterineth
2009 Award Category: Genres: Ficlets: Men of the North

Story Type: Story : Length: Short Story
Rating: General -- Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: Living among Elves isn’t as easy as one thinks, especially with the constant reminders of how different a mortal is from an immortal. Featuring Estel and Elrond. Inspired by OAA Prompt 132— “Perfect” and EAC’s contest, ‘Life.’


Reviewed by: Jedi Sapphire -- Score: 10

I love your little Estel ficlets! Especially this one, it was so sweet and touching. And, of course, very believable. You've done a wonderful job of getting into the young Aragorn's head and expressing how it must have been for him, the sole mortal growing up among 'perfect' Elves, with nobody else ever falling sick or needing much sleep - and especially with something special coming up. (The fic also made me very glad he didn't have to grow up in Mirkwood or Lorien - that would surely have been far worse.) {He heard the door open, but didn’t hear any footsteps. That was a bad thing about living among elves—you could never hear them coming up behind you.} I loved that line. You managed to convey the difference between Elves and Men, and in just the aspect that would have been noticed and grumbled about by a child. It also conjures images of Elves sneaking up on Estel when he is doing something less lawful than fiddling with his comforter. Estel's reaction when Elrond asked what was wrong was perfect. That's just how a child would react, and you have to feel sorry for this particular child. I adored Elrond's surprise for Estel. He must have been the best foster-father possible, and I'm sure Estel felt the absence of his parents far less than he would otherwise have done. This was a delightful fic, and I loved re-reading it!

Reviewed by: Fiondil -- Score: 6

It’s not easy being the only mortal child in Imladris, especially when you are sick. It makes it even worse. Poor Estel. I know how he feels being sick and feeling left out of things. I remember when I was in kindergarten missing out on making applesauce in school because I had the measles. I was absolutely devastated. Calenlass does a lovely job of portraying the loving relationship between Estel and Elrond and I liked the connection between the lunar eclipse (and the meaning of the word) and Estel’s own feelings of being eclipsed by the Elves around him. Elrond’s gentle reassurances are a nice touch and you can sense the love he has for this particular child. For those who like Elrond and Estel stories, this one is worth reading. Good job, Calenlass!

Reviewed by: Virtuella -- Score: 5

Oh, I remember very well how I liked this when you first posted it. I enjoy your crisp prose and the general atmosphere of this piece, so calm and smooth and at teh same time very warm-hearted. The eclipse symbol works well. It's a lovely touch to let a child learn that perfection doesn't make people lovable. I've actually been thinking about this recently in the context of moral philosophy and thought that if everybody was perfectly virtuous as Aristotle envisages, it would be a more harmonious world, but also, perhaps, a rather dull one?

Reviewed by: Marethiel -- Score: 5

I absolutely loved this story the very first time I read it. It skillfully touched on so many themes loved by LoTR afficionados: an Adan child growing up among the "perfect" Eldar; Celebrian, and her relationship to the family; the father-son dynamic of Elrond and Estel/Aragorn. And they were all woven so beautifully in with a natural phenomenon that is, in itself, a metaphor for young Estel! Beautifully and realistically written, filled with the pathos of a left-out child, the wisdom of an 'ada' with thousands of years' experience dealing with young ones... Just a delight from start to finish.

Reviewed by: Thundera Tiger -- Score: 5

A lovely ficlet. I like the idea of a private room built specifically for Celebrian. It sounds like something she would enjoy. The fact that Elrond decides to share it with an ailing Estel is a heart-warming gesture and it speaks of how much Estel has come to mean to him. I enjoyed the parallel drawn between the eclipsing moon (which Estel notes does not stay eclipsed forever) and the frustrations he must have felt as a mortal child in an elven realm, especially when sick. But even more than that, I enjoyed the fact that Elrond seems to operate both in the present and in the future, while the past feels as though it is always lurking in the back of his mind. And that feels just right for the Master of Rivendell.

Reviewed by: Larner -- Score: 4

Nice to read this one again. Young Estel is feeling excluded and rebellious. There is to be an eclipse of the moon, but he's been sick and can't go out to see. Why does he, as a Mortal, have be be the only one in the valley to become ill or have to struggle to learn things Elves appear to be able to learn automatically? Much is learned that night as Elrond provides a way for the child to see the celestial display and the two discuss the nature of being eclipsed. Nice use of the metaphor to see the lesson conveyed.