Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards

Claws

Author: Elena Tiriel
Nominator: Tanaqui
2006 Award Category: Races: Villains: Fixed-Length Ficlet - Second Place

Story Type: Fixed-Length Ficlet : Length: True Drabble
Rating: G -- Reason for Rating: N/A
Summary: A dark creature covets a gem from Smaug's hoard...


Reviewed by: SĂșlriel -- Score: 6

LOL! Bad!Raven The thing that strikes me about your writing is the strength, both visual and emotional, or what you *don't* say. Your writing is so tight, your words choices so precise, that you are able to pack an incredible amount of impact into a (much too quick) 100 words. I honestly can't think of anyone else who could use both corvine and hidey-hole in the point of view of one character and make it a consistant voice! I find this particular drabble to be as fine an example of it's kind as I can ever remember seeing - focusing in to look at the technical elements of setup, conflict and resolution, even an entirely belivable POV switch with such strong and distinctive voices - then pulling back to re-read the amazingly smooth narrative is a double delight. Thank you! Becky

Reviewed by: Tanaqui -- Score: 5

This is a deliciously Dark drabble, showing there is no honour amongst thieves. Elena Tiriel takes us to the heart of a crow's delight in sparkling gems, acquisitiveness and greed. For a moment, we soar with him as he attempts to make good his escape. Then she deflates (or should that be excarnates?) our excitement. The brilliance of this drabble lies not in what is said but what is implied – the manner of Smaug taking his revenge on the thief who has dared enter his domain. Concluding with that delicious throwaway line indicating this is not the first time such a duel has taken place....

Reviewed by: elliska -- Score: 4

Oh my gosh! I absolutely love birds and I have watched crows of various types just clearly rejoicing in the little prizes that they find and hide. So I thought you just did a fantastic job of capturing the crow here--especially his fluttering heart. Great! But the end! The little line, right out of the blue, describing the crow's fate! That was really sickenly powerful. Don't mess with Smaug, indeed. Perfect!

Reviewed by: Raksha the Demon -- Score: 3

A wicked little piece about flying thieves, among whom there is neither honor nor mercy. Very true to the character of Smaug! Bilbo was fortunate in his cleverness and very good luck.

Reviewed by: Dwimordene -- Score: 3

Minus the fact that crows and ravens have a positive significance for the Dwarves, this reminds me of the relationship between wargs and orcs: the [friendship of their kind] is an opportunistic use and abuse of each other. The crow steals Smaug's gems, while Smaug retrieves it without a second thought for the crow-thief's survival. Interesting side-view into [The Hobbit].

Reviewed by: Jenn_Calaelen -- Score: 3

An interesting and unusual tale. I like the way that you show the crow (or similar) and Smaug in this tale. They each seem to act in a natural way and it makes it a interesting drabble. I like it especially becaus eit is about Smaug, who I think needs more stories about him...

Reviewed by: Elen Kortirion -- Score: 3

Very nicely realised look at what it means to be a dragon. I don't know if you need to add the notes - the fine detail of the singed claw disinte0grating beneath him really brought home the concept of dragonish obsession nicely.

Reviewed by: Bodkin -- Score: 3

I suppose I should feel sorry for the crow - but being greedy for jewels from a dragon's bed is hardly a sign of any great wisdom. Of course the dragon is even greedier - but he will get his comeuppance in time.

Reviewed by: Marta -- Score: 3

Ah, so Smaug wasn't the only baddie taking up residence in Erebor! It seems to be an ongoing theme in Tolkien canon that te underlings live out their masters, and this is no exception. It certainlybroadened my perception of "The Hobbit".

Reviewed by: Lindelea -- Score: 3

Whew. Breath-taking, and so skillfully wrought, amazing detail in economy of words. The raven is tragically believable, and the contrast in claws and covetousness between the two characters works well.

Reviewed by: Dreamflower -- Score: 2

A very different OC tries to burgle from Smaug, and loses. An interesting perspective, and perfectly plausible, given what we know of dragons and of ravens.

Reviewed by: Marigold -- Score: 2

A dark look at two very different creatures coveting something that is of no value to either.

Reviewed by: Llinos -- Score: 2

I liked the way that the crow's pov builds in excitement and then ends so suddenly. Smaug's boredom with the whole thing is a very good counterpart to that.