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Msg# 9582

MEFA Reviews for Friday, November 28, 2008 (Part Two) Posted by annmarwalk November 28, 2008 - 18:12:30 Topic ID# 9582
Title: Between Childhood and Coming of Age · Author: Dreamflower ·
Races: Hobbits: Friendship · ID: 141
Reviewer: Golden · 2008-11-28 15:24:52
Oh yes cathleen I certainly loved getting this story as a Yule Gift
last year. :) It is a great story and I loved to read it! It is very
well written and I simply love the interaction between the
cousins..and Pips reaction when he heard what to poor Merry once
happend when he judged the lass wrong and kissed her. *giggles* Also
the end of the story..hihi..well I hope Sancho learned something and
took those wise last words to heart. ;)
Thanks Barb!

Title: Took Broth · Author: Pearl Took · Genres: Humor: Shire · ID: 543
Reviewer: Cathleen · 2008-11-28 15:25:26
Heh, heh - it's hard to imagine any hobbit hesitating when it comes to
food! This is a wonderful, hobbity story and an excellent read!

Title: Frogdom · Author: Neilia · Genres: Humor: Elven Lands · ID: 192
Reviewer: Golden · 2008-11-28 15:34:12
*giggles* That story is one of the funniest I have ever read. Its all
so good to picture and Pippins cheek is just so cute... now he knows
that Gandalf is not only barking, but can also bite. *L*

Title: For Our Friends · Author: Pearl Took · Genres: Drama · ID: 654
Reviewer: Cathleen · 2008-11-28 15:34:30
I love the excitement in this story and the unusual way of gapfilling
by expanding on each of the characters' thoughts from scenes that were
done in which we really didn't get to see inside their minds.

Title: Pippin-Frog For A Day · Author: Neilia · Genres: Alternate
Universe: Incomplete · ID: 115
Reviewer: Golden · 2008-11-28 15:38:53
And here this most funny story continues. I was delighted when I saw
it. Its a great read and brings tears of joy in ones eyes. Pippin
still has his cheek even as a frog..and poor Merry. Well but Pip gets
his shock too. I hope this story continues soon.

Title: Faeries · Author: Pearl Took · Times: Fourth Age and Beyond ·
ID: 304
Reviewer: Cathleen · 2008-11-28 15:40:23
I love the stories that explore the myth of the Took Sight and the
Faerie legend. This was also a very nice look at the adult Pippin in
his role as father to little Faramir Took. I can definitely see
glimpses of the lad Pippin was and the grown-up hobbit considering how
to talk to his son about the faerie legend. I wonder if Pip was
remembering a time when he discussed the same thing with his own da? A
very special tale with a lovely feel for father and son closeness.

Title: A Day in Time · Author: Pearl Took · Times: Multi-Age · ID: 230
Reviewer: Cathleen · 2008-11-28 15:43:32
This story is somewhat unusual and of course, very well done. I've
never read anything quite like it!

Title: Of Cake and Crumbs and Distant Dreams · Author: Lindelea ·
Races: Hobbits: Hurt/Comfort · ID: 688
Reviewer: Golden · 2008-11-28 15:53:29
What a sweet moment between the cousins. This story has such a great
warming atmosphere with a hint of sadness in it. I really like how you
portrait Frodo and Pip here and also that Frodo also after the Quest
still is the big cousin that can make Pip feel save and comforted.

Title: Loudwater · Author: Adaneth · Times: Late Third Age: General
Fixed-Length Ficlets · ID: 63
Reviewer: Elena Tiriel · 2008-11-28 15:58:23
Adaneth's drabble, "Loudwater", is such pleasure to read that I do it
again at every opportunity.... She claims that it the first drabble
she wrote -- but if that's truly the case, then I will have to start
believing in reincarnation. LOL!

The most surprising part is the point of view: the river Bruinen,
which has much to say in this drabble, as befits its common tongue
name, Loudwater. What an inventive idea to make it the PoV character!

The vivid opening, [Drifts of rain or drifts of snow], is brilliant; I
get hooked by the rhythm and imagery from that very first phrase. The
PoV character is just water, not even coalescing into a rivulet yet,
or emerging as springs, much less a rushing river... yet it is already
a conscious, sentient, and clearly perceptive entity.

The language is so picturesque and evocative, I could almost feel the
Bruinen's revulsion at being sullied by the touch of the Nazgul horses.

I love how Elrond is referred to, as simply the [Master] or the
[Mariner's son]... the river is busy taking messages not just to the
sea, but to the Lord of Waters, Ulmo himself, and so is cognizant of
the more mythic aspects of Elrond's background.

And [Haven of the Mariner's son] is a perfect example of the many
layers of meaning Adaneth puts into this drabble, vaguely suggestive
of Earendil's ports of call as well as directly describing Imladris.

This is a fine example of how a drabble should be written, and I hope
Adaneth writes more when she can.

Well done!

Title: My Precious · Author: SheBit · Genres: Romance: Drabbles · ID: 14
Reviewer: Elena Tiriel · 2008-11-28 16:07:38
Oh, I am so glad I read the warning before reading this vignette!

This is truly a vivid description of Grima Wormtongue's stalking of
Eowyn. Told from his point of view, it gives an accurate picture of
just how depraved the man could be... and how much he endangered
Eowyn. It gave me the creeps!

Nicely done!

Title: Five things that never happened to Nerdanel · Author: Meril ·
Genres: Alternate Universe: Angst/Tragedy · ID: 389
Reviewer: Elleth · 2008-11-28 16:10:16
I have read this story several times already, and still find myself
mulling over what to write as a review - there is so much to say, and
very little I can do to do the whole thing justice.

This result of the 'five things that never happened to ...' meme is a
truly great achievement, sketching possibilities (or rather,
impossibilities) in magnificent detail while still leaving much to the
reader's imagination. Meril depicts Nerdanel's strengths, weaknesses
and actions not through what she did do, but what she did not do and
never would, resulting in unique looking-glass realities that allow
for explorations of the character of Feanor's wife far beyond your
ordinary Silmarillion fanfiction. She does this without descending
into cliches and tropes, but instead writes in magnificent
near-Tolkienian style that leaves the reader speechless and perfectly
compliments the subject matters of her stories. The stories themselves
- Nerdanel's flight from Feanor, her giving him up, her voluntary
death after the birth of her twin sons, her accompanying Feanor and
sharing in his doom (beautiful and powerful and terrifying), and their
staying in Valinor and debating what-ifs (a lovely sort-of meta) - all
have the power to grab your heart and squeeze (at least if you are a
relentless Feanor/Nerdanel shipper like I am) and would make for
interesting full-scale AUs. But here, much of their power comes from
their brevity.

Magnificently done, Meril. Thank you for sharing this gem.

Title: Comfort and Joy · Author: Pearl Took · Times: Mid Third Age:
Eriador · ID: 656
Reviewer: Golden · 2008-11-28 16:14:18
*giggle* Oh I remember the night that was the reason for this bunny. I
think I started cooking a menu at like 2 in the morning. But it was
yummy.The story you made ou of it is so funny. *L* Frodo and Merry,
well those two have no easy life with Pip around, huh? But the love
they fell for each other is just so warming and cute.

Title: Relief · Author: Tanaqui · Races: Men: General Drabbles · ID: 446
Reviewer: Elena Tiriel · 2008-11-28 16:20:29
*Fans self*

Okay, let's just stipulate that Captain-general of Gondor's heart
isn't the only one that is [thundering]. Mine is going almost as fast
as it did when the damnable burglar alarm went off by accident -- and
quite unexpectedly -- this morning... LOL!

This is just so vivid, Tanaqui... and so sensuous... and so sensual!
And did I mention erotic, though not overtly sexual?

I'd write more, but really I'm rather.......... erm, distracted.....
watching all those.... ripples.....

Is it me, or is it really, really hawt in here?

Very well-written, my talented friend! ;-)

Title: A Harmony In Autumn · Author: Oshun · Genres: Romance: Elven
Lands · ID: 49
Reviewer: Ignoble Bard · 2008-11-28 16:32:00
Turgon is founding Gondolin and is looking for a few good Elves to
help. Fingon feels his brother is making a mistake and decides, at his
father's urging, to go and tell him so. Glorfindel has his own reasons
for answering the call, not the least of which is his beloved friend
Ecthelion. In her own inimitable way, Oshun creates a story of the
love between Glorfindel and Ecthelion set against the backdrop of the
founding of Gondolin, interweaving politics with romance in a rich
tapestry of character and event that is unmatched by other writers of
this genre.

The Glorfindel/Ecthelion pairing is one that is often written by slash
writers but, as usual, Oshun manages to make the pairing all her own.
Her Glorfindel is at once shy and bold, wondering how his declaration
of affection might be met by his intended. But his worries turn out to
be unfounded as Ecthelion has felt the same for him for a long time.
They never knew until parted how deep their feelings went and how much
their desire harmonized each with the other.

The moments of tenderness between the two are sweet and satisfying.
The inclusion of Findekano is a welcome addition as she writes his
character so well. Taken all together, this is as fine an example of
how to write a popular pairing as you're ever likely to find. I
recommend this one wholeheartedly!

Title: Least Expected · Author: Imhiriel · Genres: Alternate Universe:
Drabbles · ID: 512
Reviewer: Elena Tiriel · 2008-11-28 16:42:19
Chilling doesn't even begin to describe this perfectly feasible
Alternate Universe drabble by Imhiriel.

The actions are completely consistent with the canon that she quotes
after the drabble; only the timing is different enough that the Grey
Company doesn't meet Theoden's escort, but Grima Wormtongue's instead.
Now, he may have just been in the right place at the right time, on
his flight to Saruman at Isengard... or perhaps, something even more
sinister has happened, and he is now the leader of the Rohirrim.
Either way, the consequences are harsh for Halbarad and, presumably,
the Dunedain that rode with him.

(Eeep. I just remembered that Elladan and Elrohir was in that company,
too. As if the scenario weren't already bad enough!)

But as shocking as the action is in the overall, we ain't seen nothin'
yet, until we get to the last two words.... And then the bottom falls
out of Middle-earth.

I am so grateful to Dwimordene for asking for AUs for her birthday;
the results have been eye-opening! And I think this one ranks as one
of the most horrific scenarios.

Very well done!

Title: Forfeit · Author: Branwyn (Lady Branwyn) · Times: Late Third
Age: Gondor Drabbles · ID: 401
Reviewer: Elena Tiriel · 2008-11-28 16:51:38
Lady Branwyn's drabble, "Forfeit", is a satisfying glimpse of the
honorable soldier that is Beregond. He is offered a way to escape the
judgement for his desertion (while he rescued Faramir) that he knows
may result in his being put to death. Yet, he will not have it said
that he was fled in a cowardly manner. Insted of running, he makes his
uniform ready to pass inspection, and watches over his sleeping son on
what may be the last night of his life.

I was always impressed by Beregond's character in the book, and I
think this drabble vividly illustrates the depth of his honor and courage.

Very well done!

Title: The Lowest Circle · Author: Tanaqui · Races: Elves: Drabbles ·
ID: 449
Reviewer: Elena Tiriel · 2008-11-28 17:04:07
Tanaqui's drabble, "The Lowest Circle" is just plain horrifying. It is
about an Elf being slowly turned into an Orc in the dungeons of
Morgoth or Sauron, and the creepy environment gives me claustrophobia.

But most horrifying is not just the cramped quarters and the darkness,
but as the memory of stars begins to fade, and then as it becomes
hated, the transition from an Elven soul to an Orc's is complete. I
could feel sympathy for the Elf -- but how can one feel sympathy for
an Orc? Even though it is the same creature.

Very compelling and thought-provoking writing... and enormously
disturbing, as well.

Title: The Clear Ringing Of Silver Trumpets · Author: Lithilien
Quicksilver · Genres: Drama: Featuring Boromir or Faramir · ID: 278
Reviewer: Nancy Brooke · 2008-11-28 17:10:03
The author does a great job here of bringing us Boromir's thoughts
still somewhat muddled by the ring even after his ephiphany. A tough
balancing act will managed.

Title: Of First Impressions and Old Friends · Author: Dreamflower ·
Races: Cross-Cultural: Frodo and Faramir · ID: 146
Reviewer: Nancy Brooke · 2008-11-28 17:19:23
If nothing else, this is a remarkable exercise in persepective, but
the different tellings of similar events combine to make a charming
and entertaining tale.

Title: Meant to Be · Author: Pearl Took · Races: Other Beings · ID: 137
Reviewer: Cathleen · 2008-11-28 17:34:17
I was so pleased when Pearl wanted to write the story of Tulip's
beginnings, and how appropriate since she is the person who gave
Pippin's little knitted piglet material form in the real world! And I
adore the POV she chose to use. I think this is the type of story
which really must be told in the first person because it makes it that
much more intimate in tone. When the idea for Tulip was running about
in my thoughts I knew I wanted the kind of special toy for wee Pippin
that would stand out as a solid character in her own right, and one
that would be able to challenge Pippin's own pov as often as agree
with it. And so Tulip was born and introduced in the first chapter of
my faerie story, ready to accompany him on his adventure in the woods.
Tulip became the voice of conscience as much as a treasured companion,
often taking on the persona of Eglantine Took and helping to prevent
Pippin from stepping too far over the line into mischief or danger.
She was simply a "knitted piglet", as described in my tale, and I
hadn't envisioned her very far beyond that except for giving her green
eyes, like her lad, albeit embroidered ones! When Pearl wanted to
write "Meant to Be" she informed me that Tulip had to go through a
longer process in order to come out looking appropriate. Not being a
knitter (although I wish I was) I had never heard of the "felting
process", which she explained to me as a way of giving the creation
more of the appearance of a plump, stuffed piggy, rather than looking
flat, sort of like a knitted doily! Lol!!

In "Meant to Be" Pearl does a marvelous job of describing not only the
felting Eglantine would have needed to do, but carries it a step
further and describes Tulip's feelings as she is being created. An
aspect that Pearl included, and which I found particularly poignant
(and amusing!) was the actual breath from Eglantine, whether on
purpose or by chance, that brought Tulip to life and symbolised her
special connection to Pippin's mum.

So, thank you, Pearl, both for knitting and felting my dear Tulip, and
for writing this lovely story!

Title: The Nightingale · Author: Maeve Riannon · Times: First Age and
Prior · ID: 404
Reviewer: Rhapsody · 2008-11-28 17:55:33
This is such a gem of a story simply because it has so much: first we
perceive Melian and the world through Dior's eyes, the first known
half-elf and how he tries to make sense of the world around him. Then
the perspective shifts to Melian who at first sight seems to be rooted
in the present, but as the end comes near one starts to realise that
her perception of time is different. I could go in more detail, but I
rather leave it up to others to discover it themselves. However I find
the themes which Maeve is exploring here well done: time and the
meaning of it for different races, but also how different races might
come to love another and how they can find the way to the hearts of
another. He knows that his parents managed to achieve to cross that
bridge and we as a reader know that he will eventually marry Nimloth.
I love the light touches upon their budding romance in this story.
However Dior tries to understand what his grandmother tries to tell
him as he tries to make sense of her role in his life and that of the
Doriathrim. Besides that all, there is of course Galadriel, the
discussion of Luthien's journey's, cakes, fierce dragon's and Túrin.
How Maeve wove this all into this magnificently written story, do read
this story to find out! I hope that many will be just as charmed by
her storytelling as I was and still am.

Title: Shelter From the Storm · Author: SlightlyTookish · Races:
Cross-Cultural: Friendship · ID: 315
Reviewer: Nancy Brooke · 2008-11-28 18:09:10
A very pleasant vignette. I always like to see Pippin/Boromir fics,
those two 'princes' had so much in common.

Title: My Legacy · Author: spookystoy · Genres: Drama: General
Drabbles · ID: 407
Reviewer: Rhapsody · 2008-11-28 18:10:32
Meetings after so many ages that have passed are intriguing to write,
especially when it is about an absolutely estranged relationship
between father and son. I think that alone is a challenge, however
Spookystoy picked up the gauntlet and managed to capture such palpable
tension in just hundred words. Sometimes when I reached the end I
really blinked and thought: yeps a true drabble! What she does so well
in this piece is capturing both sides: Celebrimbor anger and resent
towards his father. But this ficlet also carries Curufin's fatherly
pride and in a way possessive feelings as a craftsman. This line
reflects it so well: ["For better or for worse, you remain my
masterpiece." ] This drabble reflects a relationship gone wrong,
somewhere, but a love of a father always will remain. I can however
imagine how Celebrimbor would have flinched at such proud words after
all he, as his father's [masterpiece] has done during the events in
Eregion. Those Fëanorians, you put them up for ages in Mandos and
still their pride, well, Curufin's particulary, remains undiminished.
Well drabbled Spookystoy, especially since it is one of your first pieces!

Title: Flame of Life · Author: Imhiriel · Times: Multi-Age:
Fixed-Length Ficlets · ID: 114
Reviewer: dkpalaska · 2008-11-28 18:13:42
This may be one of the most difficult subjects I have ever seen
Imhiriel tackle in drabble form, and at the same time one of the most
inspirational. The Imperishable Flame is hardly a commonly or
thoroughly-explored character in either Tolkien's writings or fanfic.
Yet the author takes what little is from the Master's pen and combines
it with similar mythological/religious themes and characteristics from
the real world. The result is a marvellous and thought-provoking
commentary on life, creation and the search for meaning.

I love how it is brought out that the power of the Flame is not good
or evil in itself, but is dependent upon the will and intention of the
one seeking or creating. (A sense of that bond that exists between
making and destroying...) The Flame is not attainable, but it is
essential. All this and more is brought out beautifully and movingly
by the careful wording and phrasing, the structure and content; well I
can believe via language and tone that this is the true voice of the
Secret Fire.

This is definitely one of those pieces that invite not just rereading,
but intense contemplation about applicability to life in general, of
our own intentionality and goals. Superbly done!

Title: And all was made ready · Author: Dreamflower · Races:
Cross-Cultural: Friendship · ID: 427
Reviewer: Cathleen · 2008-11-28 18:14:08
Dreamflower's story of Aragorn's Coronation is told through the eyes
of our four famous hobbits and is delightful and stunning in its
descriptive scenes of what is happening around them as they prepare to
enter the Great White City. This story was written for the Gen-Fic
group's very first challenge and what a wonderful addition it was to
all the fine stories contributed. Dreamflower, in her usual adept
style makes her readers feel as though we were actually there for the
coronation in person! Such magnificent scenes she paints - from her
description of all the bells in Gondor ringing, to the mind's eye
associations each character makes as they prepare to crown the new
king at long last! Even the details of the clothing they wear are
woven with care and again made me feel as if I were a part of the
crowd watching with pride as our triumphant Hobbits and Men accompany
Aragorn to his destiny.

Frodo is hesitant to be the centre of attention, yet determined to
once more do what is expected of him. Sam, while thoughtful and
ever-vigilant at Frodod's side, is concerned over what his old Gaffer
would think of him all dressed in his finery! Pippin is filled with
pride for his eldest cousin's accomplishments, and wants to make sure
everyone knows about what it really cost to defeat Sauron and save
Middle-earth. And Merry is ever watchful of his youngest cousin,
amazed by the maturity he sees in the youth and marvelling at what
they have all been through.

"And All Was Made Ready" is simply a must-read for anyone who wants to
feel as though she was actually there on that special day!

MEWD, Dreamflower!